This might not be in active development, but there’s enough here for me to want to leave some thoughts. Maybe you’ve already learned these for your other games? Maybe they’re addressed in the full version? Who knows!
- The workout minigame is interesting but wears a bit thin when it’s the only thing to do in the game and you’re bottlenecked by XP.
I’d love to see training still limited to once/day but maybe started also from the pool? That way you don’t have to loose a day’s progress just to catch someone’s unique conversation for a specific time of day.
Some minigame QoL ideas:
- In the last 2 seconds, no new targets spawned
- If more than X (let’s say 3) targets spawn in half a second, there’s half a second cooldown before the next ones spawn. It’s currently possible for 4 or more to spawn almost at once and it can take longer than a second to get to the latter ones.
- Some other kind of variety to keep each stage interesting; click and hold targets? Once to press repeatedly? Some other ideas you can swipe from the likes of Osu!! ?
- A clearer way to tell how the score converts to experience points. (If this is raised in the tutorial, I skipped it; generated voices really bother me - a way to show that tutorial without the voiceover would be great!)
Otherwise, maybe an option added to the preferences to change the art style without having to start a new save? From the pictures on the itio page, I thought there was some kind of reality warping going on at first, which is why there was both a drawn and realism art style of the same poses!
Dialog feedback:
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This is just my own opinion, however some of the writing is very… repetitively grandiose? Like the repeated uses of “they’re more than a X, they’re a Y”? You might wish to give the script another pass, especially if it’s been produced or edited in part by an LLM.
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More than a few inner monologues aren’t labelled. When there’s no image to give the player a point of reference, there’s a few cases it’s confusing. For instance at the start of chapter three, we go straight from Novastride’s Journaling to Orchid’s own thoughts about inferiority and her new suit, when my first reaction is “why is Novastride worried about feeling inferior?” XD
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Also quite a few cases where the first letter is missing from a passage. “ had entered the room”, “’ll add it to thei list.” “ had come here to gather some thoughts,” he radiation was a process we had perfect-” etc. Feels too consistent to be a typo; maybe some formatting gone awry?
Some good stuff here if you ever come back to it; and if not I hope you’re enjoying your other projects! :D