There’s a few bits of missing formatting all throughout but that’s fine for something this young; although in passage 198 Yasmin’s words are using Luna’s text colour if I’m following correctly. (orange instead of green)
Also couldn’t get any of the arcade game menus to continue; the racing passage refers to a random, but rerolling ~20 times didn’t seem to change the text outcome, maybe the error with that menu is odd? Couldn’t figure out how to get debug mode going and it seemed more than a simple syntax error, so I’ll leave that with you!
Reading through the rest of the story in passages, was interesting to say the least! With Magilumere’s manga’s conclusion still fairly recent in mind it’ll be interesting to see how you write about the interactions between governance and independance! Keep it up! :D