I don't usually comment on stuff I download and consume on itch but I've been following this visual novel since it came out and I kinda put it off to the side for a year or two. Coming back to it just..wow. Its so incredibly good and the story is something I absolutely adore. Last time I played it I swear it was a joke but after reading through Alfy's route and getting to see a more serious side made me fall ever so in love with it. MoF, dunno if you'd read this, but you did a fantastic job so far regarding world building and making me really anticipate the next release. I wish I was here when Chapter 1 was still being developed! I was so very wrong for putting it off for such a long time. Do not continue reading unless you want to hear some critique and final notes ^^
Now away from the praise and on to some more minor outlying things that I find myself coming back to. (This is my opinion and I will never tell you how to write your own story). I always thought that all the story elements, especially with Tate's route, feels very fast and rudimentary. I like the fact that we see a lot of action in Chapter 1 but so much stuff happens and its a lot to try and understand from a perspective of longevity. Though making the characters end in romance at the end is nice and feels rewarding, it ultimately makes me wonder how the rest of the story is gonna go. I feel like spacing out the characters and forcing you to get to know them more should be encouraged instead of just throwing in a romance after 3 days of knowing people. Its just a slight peeve of mine when it isn't established that you know each other first and then suddenly you fall in love so fast. I think that giving them more things to do and more ways to explore their characters before throwing in the romance would be very nice and give the reader more of a connection.
Now by no means do I say that this is a bad novel! If I were to give it a rating, an 8 out of 10 would be it, given I have personal gripes. I truly love how its shaping up and I cant help but smile even while typing this and getting excited for the next release. I truly recommend anyone new check it out and experience it for yourself if you are just looking through comments and stumble upon this one. I will not be leaving this for another year and will actively follow and support whatever you do! Maybe I'll give that patreon a try haha. But seriously, this is phenomenal and if I find myself spending the entire day going through this over and over looking for additional secrets then you truly have something wonderful here. Thank you for making this novel! Love it!
(pls don't ever stop until its fully done i need this)