Just finished the prologue! I think this game has a lot of potential and reminds me a lot of of older visual novels. But I do have some issues with the pacing as the story feels scattered at times. I understand that English was not the original language but regardless, it still feels a bit messy. Its almost as if things happen just to happen, there isn't any build up or why it occurs. I think you tried to fit a lot of things into the prologue when you should've let it develop slowly. That way you can build tension.
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In the beginning I thought it was starting out okay, but I do get the vibe that she's a Mary Sue type. I don't think that there's anything wrong with those type of characters, but it seems as though every character we meet is extremely attracted to her. With Peter especially, I want to understand why he's so attracted to her, and apparently "stops" bullying Gabriel for a period of time, but then now he's doing it again? Peter as a character is just there to start off the story, and he feels confusing to me. But his "relationship" with Lilith confused me even more. I understand her motive, but everything just happens too fast. She gets Gabriel's number> then receives Peters number> the only a day or two passes and they're already dating? Only a few days ago he was berating her and telling her to dress normal. If her plan was to kill him I think it would've made more sense if she were to adapt to his version of "normal" and then kill him. And I also would've liked to see Lilith and Gabriel interact more, throughout the story they rarely interact and I want to see chemistry between them. They have a lot of similarities but there's not enough to make me see them as a couple.
I apologize if this seems a lot ahaha, the game is still in it's development so maybe by the time the game releases my criticisms wont matter anymore. I really do hope the best for this game, the art is what attracted me the most plus the characters are really pretty. Goodluck on making the game<3