WHAAAT a 10/10. I normally don't comment but I just gotta
Let's start off with the story telling and general world building;
the writing was simple, straight to the point, yet very detailed. Fun to read and generally wasn't a dialogue vomit. Just executed very well, all in all
The black and whites throughout everything gives you that feeling of being on edged, as if something is just gonna jump out, i swear on shift 2 I genuinely felt like somebody was gonna ambush me in the alley. The general art of the environment is also a big chef's kiss, because the little writings on some of the parts of the game gives you that eerie micro bits of lore that makes you want to play more ( and girl trust me I WANT TO PLAY MORE ( had a paper to finish but didn't bc of this VN.. curse you..! ).
next is characters; OH WOW, the characters in this VN honestly I gotta say feels realistic, every single character just felt like somebody that can be somebody IRL. the confrontation between Lane and BB also just felt sooooooo good, and add MC's reaction to the different types of confrontation? Oh i love, because it really did add that sense of urgency to stop a fight between two people. From the minor characters to the major characters, everything just felt so rich! you put a lot of love in this, its admirable and wowie its great.
next is MC; mc feels natural, mc feels like a blank slate but also very full, she literally just embodies someone ( I MEAN AT LEAST IN MY HUMBLE OPINION ) who is a decent 'trying-to-get-by' person. I like how she carries herself throughout all routes basically, you did well.
next is Lane; what an ass, literally have met thousands of men like this guy, a sad misogynistic dude who got his heart broken because of one relationship and now acts out. I like his character because despite being an ass and very infuriatingly sexist, he also is a character written well to still carry morals, despite being a REALLY shitty person when jealous or upset. He feels natural, real and just a good character.
Amelia; I dont really have any opinion on her right now because there isn't that much scenes with her, but the bitchiness she shows when you go to the BB route doesn't feel force but at the same time kinda does, i like the detail about her hair being red though
BB! ; been a while since i found the yandere of a yandere VN be attractive, im not even gonna lie. I particularly like how fast you make him act natural towards MC, to not be caught that he stalks her by her, choosing his wordings and carefully tip-toing around MC just makes him being written sooo well. When you go for the Lane route too, oh wow, the power going out when the confrontation between him and Lane honestly freaked me out bc I half assumed he was going to do something bad to Lane, but you're dragging that reader anticipation, which i appreciate bc we luv being kept on edge
ALL IN ALL ITS REALLY GOOD, PLEASE DONT ABANDON THIS