Fantastic demo. The pacing is great in that you don't need to read a wall of text before the next thing happens. When there is more text, the writer doesn't neglect engagement for the sake of realism. I think it strikes a good middle ground for the general target audience for this sort of visual novel. I'd personally like to see some text heavy segments, especially in NSFW scenes, just to see what kind of chops the writer really has. But with how brief this demo is, any take away I have should be taken with a grain of salt.