The 0.5 public release is two chapters long? Does that mean that this game is intended to be 4 chapters long in total?
Chapter 1 was a fun time. In chapter 2, the writing completely disintegrates.
I get that this is SUPPOSED to be an incest game, but until you allow the player to redefine the relationships in game, the script is unreadable garbage. I know that will make you all defensive, and respond with, "the incels don't seem to mind," but THEY aren't reading your words!
Let me show you the issue:
When the MC meets Isabella, he is all freaked out about meeting the daughter of a "friend." Why? I've met a bunch of my friends' children, nothing at all to be concerned about.
He decides (for some idiotic reason) to just lie to the girl every time he opens his mouth. It telegraphs the inevitable "You've been LYING to me. I can't trust you. I HATE YOU!" You, me, and EVERYONE else knows that is your great big act 2 cliffhanger.
Let me re-write that bit for you here. We'll pick up after the game, when you have the moron tell her that he wants to date her, except I'm going to write the scenario COMPETENTLY.
Isabella: Then what do you want, you creepy old pervert.
MC: I'm not a pervert Isabella. I saw your grandmother today, and she told me about you. I was you father's best friend (brother). So I came to watch you play. Wow, you're really good.
Isabella: You're a liar. My mother never told my grandmother who he was.
MC: I'm not lying. How else would I know who you are, where you would be, or that you never knew your father. As for what your grandmother might have told you, all that I can say is that you should probably ask her those questions.
Do you see how simple it was to establish an introduction between these two WITHOUT fucking shit up? No awkwardness at all. Incest is still a possibility. And the MC has established that the girl CAN trust him when push comes to shove.
---But NO---
You have Agatha kidnap the two of them. Keep them knocked out for hours, and move them to a private island that has to be a BARE MINIMUM of 20 miles off shore, or they could just stand on the island and SEE civilization.
I point this out, because a person unconscious for that amount of time is a serious medical emergency. (For the MC, he was rendered unconscious from blunt force trauma. He was actually killed on that street corner. But let's PRETEND not)
So you have Isabella float the idea of "Do you think the police are looking for us?"
And the MC is like, "Gee, if anybody noticed me missing that could happen"
Are you seriously suggesting to me that the MC's girlfriend, Kate, Andy, Oscar, Amanda, and Oliver are ALL going to just assume that the MC took a vacation without telling A FUCKING SOUL?!? No missing persons reports? No wellness checks? Nobody noticed the empty cubicle at work?
Are you suggesting that Isabella's teammates, coach, college friends, basketball fans, and potential stalkers don't notice HER missing?
Or is everybody just on Agatha's payroll suddenly? Simply because you couldn't use 5 minutes and 10 brain cells to come up with "let the people define the relationships" for themselves.
If I was the MC, I would fuck the dog shit out of my daughter on the island, and then see that cunt Agatha die in fucking prison for her crimes! Me and my daughter get the best relationship ever, all of the old bitch's money, AND I get my revenge.
But, NO, all you could come up with was, "If my hot, bisexual, harem loving girlfriend finds out that I know my dead best friend's hot cum dumpster of a daughter, IT WILL RUIN MY LIFE!" (OMG, are you a 14 year old GIRL?!?)