i think you are too harsh on yourself, yes your writing could use some improvements in some areas but you arent a bad writer in any way, and its your first release, practice makes perfect and i love your sense of humour and 4th wall breaking, just that alone kept me playing and made up for some of your flaws in other areas, i dont know how you usually develop your game but if you are suffering from making too many distractions then if this isnt how you do your work currently maybe try focusing first and foremost on writing and developing the central storyline and then once thats done you can work your side quests branching off it that arent necessary to the core story other than increasing affection/romancing and fleshing out the personalities of the side characters.