On a third playthrough, and it's obviously a classic but damn the typos, broken English and clunky writing can be jarring sometimes haha, lack of punctuation, clunky delivery, weird spelling like "upsi" for oopsie, etc.
If English isn't your first language it's still an amazing job, the worldbuilding, characters, dialog, still great and I definitely love what you've done, some of the most creative animations for the abilities.
But if you want a proofreader, id happily do it, just send me the script and I can give it a run through and fix it all, or I can do it in ren'py and send it back? Idk.
It's really the only criticism I have in this otherwise awesome avn id definitely put up there close to Eternum/ripples/cosy cafe