thank you so much for that very thoughtful response!! it's clear that you've engaged with it deeply, and i couldn't be happier about that 💜 and for your compliments on the writing, as well! i worked very hard on the style as you describe- aiming to invoke a particular vibe, without going full word-salad-soup. so it's a relief to see that you think it came off well 📜 i especially enjoyed your summary of the connection between deimos's feelings of aimlessness during/about sex, and how it is reflected through the lack of agency in her choices, as well as later in the merging of the gods, as well... you got it exactly. i'm gonna cry haha
you make fair points about everything, and especially the bit about the emotional points all seeming to have about the same intensity. while i was working on it, i did often feel "mm...the middle part needs more energy." because even though it's the "climax," it does still feel more or less like the rest of the game, haha... i don't mind it so much, since i like to think of the game as more of the deimos-struggles-with-emotions-simulator, and i did try to make up for that with an increase in flashing/sounds during that section...as well as the CGs being more fully rendered. but you're absolutely right that it could've felt more intense! 🫡
thank you again, i'm so appreciative of your careful reading!! and i'm so happy you enjoyed it 💚