A slick and simple scenario. On point with the theme. Toastmortem already tackled the one thing to be concern about - what if there is no legal placement, so no more questions here
Only thing else I can point out, but many of the submissions have that from what I've seen, is that the lore intro is sooooo long. One thing I like about OPR is its (or more Gaetano's) ability to condense a lot of flavor in the special rule names and keeping the mission backgrounds short and evocative.