Good job with this VN Developer, it's already quite good, it's excellent considering this is your first ever VN. Some minor wording/grammar/spelling problems, but those can always be solved. Not an ad, but I would recommend a advanced spell check tool like Grammarly or other similar programs, they can really help your writing and save you time as well, plus it's free. God, I know i really sound like an ad, but seriously it's helped me so much with my writing , i really cant recommend it enough has saved me hours i would have had to spend editing, its also help me be much more confidant in my writing as English isn't my first language. it cant truly ever replace a human editor but it can certainly help when you don't have an editor