Really enjoying this new version so far! A couple things I'm sure have already been pointed out by paid backers but I'd be remiss not to note:
- The new arousal mechanic helps a lot with the pacing of nightlife scenes, but currently makes it so Sable ends up getting more easily stressed over the course of a club shift as she gets more aroused. It's cute in its own way but feels at odds with her otherwise more relaxed high lewdness dialogue.
- Nim's war on dodgy vending machines, which is an excellent sequence that got me to laugh out loud, currently interrupts her original sequence between asking if she'd accept a lunch date and actually bringing her a sandwich. I don't dislike the new flow, but the lunch date does mention specifically it's the third time Sable's approached her.
- The new anal gloryhole scene opens with Sable thinking about the last creampie without actually requiring any previous such scenes. This one is small potatoes, 99.9% of people probably wouldn't think to make a high lewdness virgin save at all, much less when major mechanics are yet to be introduced and brick said save.
Overall, though, I'm very much enjoying reading what you've made and hope to see more of it soon!