Love your work. There were quite a few typos and grammatical errors but I enjoyed the heart and soul you put into this. I'm also not a grammar or spelling tyrant so I can forgive a lot of mistakes XD
Just adding here that there might be spoilers for those who haven't played the game so read my comments at your own risk.
Out of all the ROs in this game, Laz intrigues me the most. They're not what I pictured for a General. I find them a very refreshing take on someone who plays the role of a General. And each layer you successfully peel off them just makes me hungry for more. Like Oracle, I really want to get under their skin and find out what makes them tick. Of course, it's even better if they get flustered and uncomfortable because of Oracle >:) I really wish someone in the group can drive Laz mad the way Az drives Os mad so easily. What can I say? I just want to see Laz break XD XD
Vez is so sweet. They're my second favorite RO just cause they're supposed to be the most powerful person in the demon world but they're just so soft and so tender to MC. I love them <3 Will we ever get a scene where we find out Os feelings about their parent's relationship with Oracle? Maybe Os confronts Oracle about it too. Juicy juicy interactions XD
Also I literally felt Selene's slap across the screen. You wrote it so well that it had quite the impact. I was sympathizing with Selene but that punch was so unexpected (even if it made sense) that it made me so outraged at her in that moment.
I can't wait for the next chapter! I hope it comes soon.