Honestly this is an amazing novel I really enjoyed every second of it. It truly was a work of art. 10000/10 I just have one thing I would like to say there is a slight grammar error that you commonly use I took bunch of screen shots but I only stared to pay attention during chaper 3 to it and kinda forgot to keep going but you are using "," wrong. You keep using something called a comma splice It's basically when every you had a Subject and Verb and complete though then you used "," and the next lines also have subject and verb and complete thought it's not proper grammar the fix to that is adding a ";" or "." But simply getting rid of "," would also lead to improper grammar of something called run on sentence.
Here's am example sorry I'm not trying to be rude or know it all I just wanted to point a common grammar mistake