There are some typos and general grammatical errors in the game. It's nothing serious, but I wanted to bring it to attention.
Fairly early on, this one: "I'll suppose I will..." is redundant. It should just be "I suppose I will".
There's another one where Linda is giving fella. for the first time. "insert quote here" should just be "insert here". Though it was written correctly in the next instance where it occured. Keeping things fresh by changing up the phrasing is cool and all, but for things like this, it's arbitrary. It's better for it to just be grammatically correct and competent. I can overlook characters repeating the same lines in different settings more than I can grammar errors. Stuff like that makes the reader read a line twice or more times, or even get confused, question the grammar and whether it's correct or not... Basically causes the reader to stumble, messing up the flow. It didn't bother me like how some may interpret this as. I'm simply pointing it out and giving my thoughts. I looked at it for a second, noticed it was wrong, and moved on lol. But I have good memory. Which is good for instances like this where I can help out.
There were a few more that I caught, but I'll have to go thru to find them again because I forgot. I didn't take any screenshots or anything because I just wanted to enjoy it without any distractions or pausing.
This is all very early on in the game, as I've just started.
Spotted another grammar mistake when Julie gives the first HJ. Two things. One: If "Hmmm" is more of a questioning tone, then it should be "[comma] hmmm [question mark]". But if it's just her thinking aloud, then it's not wrong and needs no correction. And two: "We don't want the others to find out, now would we?" Should either be "We don't, do we" or "We wouldn't, would we" depending on the tone you're going for. You should know the difference between the two, sooo I'm not gonna give a full-on English language lesson ahaha. But yeah. So far, just those ones.
What I really came here to say, or rather ask is... why is the main character so ugly? XD
I know the game is pretty much finished in terms of content and development since it's hit 1.0, and another game is being worked on. Unless I'm wrong and it's not actually finished completely?
And I don't expect things to change when it's already done. I'm not gonna ask it to be. But I am gonna critique it and question it lol. Because the main character is ugly, while being short and having an odd body type overall. Obviously I'm not playing for the dude, but it is played from the MC's perspective, with the POV crap and everything. And that's the one thing that keeps me from getting into it. It's such a great ero-game, and that's pretty much my only critique so far. Aside from that, I'm loving it.
It would just be nice if there was a way to completely blur him out/make him invisible because I'm already making the conscious effort to ignore/not look at him because he ugly. All I can do is laugh at his appearance and face or ignore.
Especially when in the main storyline, with no changes or anything such as the IC option, it's questionable that these 3 beautiful women with great assets and bodies/figures (Julie especially as she's the working out type) would even give him the time of day and pursue him/flirt with him like that. They no doubt have better options. Especially Emily who goes to college and stays in a dorm while attending, I assume, as she just got back for Summer break. Yes, even Julie despite the divorce.
I get if it seems like I'm hyperfocusing, but this is just realistic criticism. It's a game, yes. But there's level to the realism and fiction vs reality.
It's never even mentioned or brought up. If anything, they call him cute, which makes me laugh. But then they all go on to f*** him? Calling someone cute is either a genuine compliment, or a way to tease/be condescending. Yall know that's true lol. If someone is actually attractive, good-looking and sexy, it's a compliment, but if they're ugly, it's the latter. A girl can call a guy cute and not wanna be anywhere near them, never mind being alone together. It would make them uncomfortable or they wouldn't even see him as a man and in that case wouldn't be bothered I guess lmao.
What I'm trying to say is the use of the word cute is wrong here, in a meta sense if you get what I mean. He's not the attractive or sexy kind of cute. Everyone here knows the difference even if they refuse to admit it.
Lastly, just to pre-empt a certain sheltered overly sensitive group that's sure to take offense to my brutally honest words, it's a fictional character so I don't wanna hear about some snowflakes crying that I'm body-shaming xD To those people I'll just say: Grow a pair will ya? Ya need thicker skin. And what I said is true whether you like it or not. In a real situation, this would never happen if he was this level of ugly, not to mention being short and not even physically fit or muscular. He's the type of guy to get zero swipes on dating apps and then delete them in outrage or be one of the suckers that pays money just to get shut out anyways lol.
I know yall probably think I'm a virgin or whatever, and why, because I'm playing an erotic game? Who said you get to decide my worth. You can shut it lol. I have experience, I'm just a freak admittedly, and I enjoy different sexual experiences, whether it's games, real life or shit even cybers*x/role-playing. I've done it all buddy. And you can disprove that just about as much as you can prove you're not virgins yourselves. I'm just shutting down the projectors before they try to have an angy keyboard warrior fit (;
If none of this shit applies to you, just ignore it.
Anyway.
If he has some sort of transformation thru working out, that'd be cool I guess. Is he gonna become taller and get a more attractive face, too? xD If not, that's lame.
I'm gonna work on 100%ing the game and will most likely return to it in the future occasionally for a good fapping, because the girls are hot, fugly mc aside. But yep. that definitely hinders the replay value for me. Great game all the same and I don't mean to be too harsh or criticize the creator's and artists' work, if it's done intentionally to make him out to be a loser that isn't blessed to have game with females, then that's fine. Mission accomplished. As long as it was intended, when it's easy to make the mc more attractive, without making him an absolute 10/10 make the ladies wet just from a glance. As that'd be too much maybe I guess.
Making it more canonically an IC plot makes some sense I guess, in that regard. However to follow that statement up with a rebuttal: With such hot chicks in the family, all blessed with beautiful dna, why is the dude such an uggo? lmao. You'd think he'd at least be a little bit more attractive, is all I'm sayin.
I like when the mc in a hentai is more attractive because it's easier for me to relate and be like "yeah that's me f*ckin her" even tho I know it's not, duhh I don't self-insert at an unhealthy degree. Just like a passin thought, yk.