tried this for a bit, it was surprisingly better than expected! :D
I do think that some of the lines had a vague sense of being almost-repeated for me, like things being "dreamlike" was probably said twice, unless I am misremembering.. (not in the mood to actually scrutinize and re-check how certain lines were said haha)
but outside of that, the writing seems pretty solid in most of the other areas. I've seen some itch demos with dialogues that are more of a snooze, to put it nicely.
the potential for intrigue and 'what's the deal with all this stuff' is there, but I wouldn't mind a simple, cute, BxG fluff too. either way works, I'll keep an eye out for this one!