Thank you very much for playing it! I deeply appreciate it!(≧▽≦)
Truth be told that for the demo, I mostly focused in making the mechanics of the game before the story. I wanted to first make sure that people would like the mechanic of my game (being that it's a bit different from most Visual Novel games out there) that is why the writing seems rushed and short (＾-＾；)
For the next update, I'm planning to finally focus on the story, like it's dialogue, grammar, and pacing. (＾▽＾)
Again, Thank you very much for giving my game a chance and for the very helpful feedback! (^▽^)