I just started playing this and I didn't like the MC's initial comments. He said his mother wants him to get a job but the MC thinks money won't help but that he needs to change. Well a job is about more than money. It will help him change. It could be the instrument of the change he wants. He's just being ignorant so that means the writer of the dialog is obtuse. Also, why does almost everything the MC says have profanity in it. That is not how normal people talk, at least not the ones I know. Why do you have to include this crap. It ruins the game.
I disagree. I thought the cussing was on point. The writing had some oddities, and some obvious grammatical and spelling errors. But on the whole, the dialogue and personality was practically perfect for each of the characters. And I know plenty of people who cuss just as much. It's just a matter of choice.