Your writing is stunning, both prose-wise and characterization-wise. The MC was such fun to get to know, and the interactions they can have with the Younger are so varied and vivid. I also love how you formatted the Journal by choosing to go for text descriptions instead of simple stat bars. That can't have been easy. Lastly, I don't normally like listening to audio while playing IFs, but I found the sounds chosen for this game to be quite agreeable with my finicky tastes. I often end up more distracted than immersed when IFs include audio, which is no fault of theirs — it's just how it is. But for some reason, this IF's audio immediately drew me into the ambience and world of the story, and it was a new experience that I enjoyed immensely. All in all, excellent work! The attention and detail put into each choice and route is outstanding. Even as someone whose MC has yet to choose a flirtatious choice and has only chosen a grand total of one (1) friendly choice, the tension, twists, and turns of MC's inner machinations and outer interactions with everyone and the world around them are more than enough to keep me wholly invested in my MC's journey and destination. Good luck with everything, and do give yourself a hefty pat on the back <3
Thank you so much for checking out the demo and for taking the time to leave such kind commentary!
One of my earliest aspirations for the game was to weave a rich story with you no matter your choices, whether you romance or befriend one, both, or neither of the twins. So even though we're only one chapter into this tale, your enjoyment of the MC's personality and the world is very encouraging. I plan to take your one (1) time friendly MC on a very distressing entertaining journey!
The text descriptions vs. stat bars decision worried me for a while, but hopefully others agree with your assessment and find a nice balance with the way it's formatted.
And your comments about the audio are so nice. I'm really glad this experience could be an agreeable first for you in the world of IFs. Definitely focused on choosing and editing sounds to be more immersive than disruptive, and changed things up a lot before settling on the soundscape that's present in the demo, so it's great to hear that the effort was worthwhile.
I appreciate the feedback! ♡
~ Effie