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Hello! The story is so captivating already! You have a very vibrant writing style. Almost poetic. I also noted the attention to detail in portraying the emotions of both the main character and the Younger. I already love the main character for being relatable and intriguing at the same time, and that's a great thing and a sign of a strong writing, I think. And thank you for the 'flaw' choice option.

That aside, I was amazed by the audio part of this story—the sounds perfectly accentuate what's happening, creating a perfect melancholic ambient for the story. And for a first attempt, in my opinion, you coded everything excellently. 

I encountered only one bug so far, in the 'but first, good morning!' choice, I think.


Good luck with the story!

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Your thoughts are all very welcome and thanks for notifying me about the bug, Vesper! Will get that resolved and updated as soon as possible, along with a few other small changes.

Incredibly happy to hear that your MC made a good first impression, and that the soundscape improved your experience! I plan to continue improving and adding to the audio moving forward. To be honest, I was afraid the writing itself might have suffered because of all the effort that went into coding these past few months, so it's great to know that the style was enjoyable, too.

The next update will hopefully be much easier after everything I've learned so far, and your support is more appreciated than you know.

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Thank you so much for the comment!

~ Effie