Real cool concept! The characters are interesting, and I liked the mini-twist towards the end, but I shan't spoil it for others reading. The prose itself looks like it wants editing, but I know this is a work-in-progress, so I understand. I value worldbuilding and story more than prose anyways, and from what I've read here, those are on solid bases.
Thank you so much! yes the polish of my prose is always a bit rough, I am dyslexic so every time I fix something I break another haha. I am really happy you like the world!! This story started as my head getting clogged with world building ideas and having to let it live. Thank you so much for giving some time to my story!!
I hope today is treating you well!!