First of all, thank you for your hard work. We appreciate every effort you put into the VN. With that, I would like to give my honest review of the current update. These opinions are personal takes, feel free to add or criticize my opinions. Spoiler warning, of course.
1. I like how you make the gals less annoying on day 3 and day 4. especially Riley with her recent background reveal. She is more tolerant towards Finn now on day 4 and so does her friends. it feels like Finn has 3 sisters instead of 1. That alone is Sweet enough to start day 4.
2. I love the fact that you add "that one gay best friend" with every GAY stereotype imaginable. I was so excited to see another TWINK join the gang. At this point, Rene is my fav char on day 4, just cause of the humor he brought me.
3. Day 4's story is kind of all over the place. So much is going on since the end of day 3. From the wedding to shooting to Max's situation ends with Riley's apology. On to day 4 TWINK reveal to MEGUKA!🗣️🔥 Then gay bar EPIC BAND BATTLE onto meeting prevy oldman right after that we had FOOD BATTLE followed by SEGGS, and not long after we get creepy stalker. Honestly, the whole day 4 feels like a fever dream. I'm not saying that day 4 is bad. The fact that it has the most comedy than any other day is quite refreshing and enjoyable. Although as a reader I couldn't help to feel confused... "WHAT'S GOING ON??!!"
4. I appreciate that you gave Artyom's character more thought. Adding more to his background bit by bit, and the rewrite on the day 2 necklace scene is sweet and romantic. It is now comparable to Mert's flower scene. Not only that day 2 rewrite is giving Artyom "More than the cover" vibes rather than the rude person he once before. Also, for the first time, Arty doesn't invalidate his advance at the end of the day. I'm quite satisfied with how it turns out.
5. As a reader, I feel like these two lines came out as rude and a bit harsh. But considering Arty's personality, it is understandable.
It feels like I'm being told, "No, you're not replacing him ever." "But I love you now and you're still alive, that is." A bit dramatic reaction from me. I suggest changing them into something like " Of course not, He is my first love and no one is going to replace that." "But you, Finn. You remind me how it feels to like someone. To love someone again." Or add another line to Artyom's existing dialog, such as "And why would I need you to replace him? You are not his replacement, Finn. You have your own place in my heart." or something like that.
I'm happy with the changes and how the VN progresses. It has improved a lot since its release. I love the fact that you are willing to listen to the community and improve from their critiques. And I hope this vn will be greater as time goes on. Congratulations on 6K downloads!