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I don’t think I can rate this one yet, as I generally don’t rate VNs until I get a general idea of what they’re about. In other words, I haven’t gotten any indication of an answer to the question: “By the end of the story, what will the characters have accomplished?” Of course, I expect this to be answered in upcoming chapters, but I think you should have more indication of where this story is actually going.

Apart from that, the main character seems quite passive. Most of what he says is just reacting to things, and not always in very interesting ways. I would think that, being a former ninja, Tao would have a more unique point of view. What are his skills, for example? And how does being a former ninja affect his perspective on what’s going on around him? Because at the moment, most of his commentary centers on the fact that he comes from a lower class than his new family. Again, I do expect this to be remedied in upcoming chapters, but you should consider giving Tao a stronger sense of personality.

Still though, from what I’ve seen of this VN, I do consider it one to watch, and I wish you luck in upcoming chapters.

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Thank you for the feedback.
I am working on it. The vision i had that because of the circumstance Tao want to make a good impression and also to make his family happy to act in the way they want him to be, but it seem with background people expect him to behave in a certain set way. I can understand that. Right know i trying my best with the help of the editor to make him less passive and make him standing his ground as moral and point of view are clashing and also going back to the prologue to fix an issue aswell.

As for where it going, the MC trying to find his purpose and trying to find out who he really is. While dealing with his inner troubles.
Which in the upcoming chapter will be adress. Also in prolouge i plan to add a few more scene to make more sense for Tao character i realize my mistake not establish fully in depth. Which a character that i planed before to appeare later to make a apprence in the prolouge who is also very important to Tao past.

I also always looking for feedback and people who like to help.

But thank you for your feedback.