To add some context: I'm new to online creative spaces as a whole and I'm trying to figure out what people will and won't appreciate. I'm used to primarily working in studio environments where feedback and critical analysis was a constant thing. It actually feels unnatural to me to read stuff without offering feedback, honestly. To me it feels like I'm taking something without giving something back, if that makes sense? But that should be something I get over, not something I should impose on other people.
So, again, apologies. I took the time to read the rest of your story with "critic mode" turned off, and I enjoyed it! I hope that makes up for being rude.