The badly written introduction of the game on this page makes me worry about the quality of the writing in the game.
Still.... The story is interesting enough that I'll give it a tentative try despite it.
(Which totally have nothing to do with me being desperate and scraping the bottom of the barrel for romance games that MAY be dark. Nope. Not at all.)
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The writing in the game is a bit better than on this page, thankfully.
But you can see it's the same writer...
Is there a reason why the mc believes that a person you meet in broad daylight is a vampire?
Like... is the artwork from a generic pack and there wasn't a nightscene there?
Or is it intentional to show how deluded the mc is?
Of course, if he IS a guy with nothing to hide, then Dalton is clearly crazy too.
(Or he just want to get laid. lol)
Cuz it's a pretty abnormal reaction to, well.... HER behavior. lol
....I'm starting to think he works for the mafia or something. >_>
He is WAY too friendly and inviting towards a crazy-person to not hide something.
....and want to get her somewhere private so he can kill her and dump her in the river or something.
Dalton is kinda cute tho. His attitude and all. 😂
...I am beginning to wonder if english is not the native language of the creator.
The writing isn't terrible, but here and there is....really weird.
Like saying "I'm like this more often", instead of saying "I'm like this most the time" or "This is what I'm usually like."
I get a feeling the writer is pretty new to writing.
Much of the conversations are blunt and without any sub-text.
It's not the best writing I've ever seen, but the story itself is actually really interesting.
Premise aside, I think this game is half a step away from being a good fit for the next yandere jam.
Based on the mc's behavior.
....I take it back. It doesn't even need modifications. She's practically there. xD
The game really DO keep you questioning what he really is tho. 😂
.....aaaand the reasons this is a yandere story just doubled. 😂
After the...er...knife-scene sleepover.
...huh.
I got the Bad Ending, and I don't for the life of me understand why....
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IS there more than one ending in this game?
Cuz I can't seem to find it.
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Overall....
The artwork is nothing special, but not bad either.
The writing is.... just a little bit better than the description on this page.
But the story itself is really intriguing.
(Although I DO wish there was a better answer as to what he really is at the end.
They seem a little bit like two peas in a pod.
Said pod being a padded cell.
But I could be wrong.... it's VERY ambiguous.)
The stalker-crazy parts was an interesting touch tho.
(And obvious from the start.)
I think that if this story was polished a bit it would be a great story.
Maybe have them meet at night, not day --to keep people guessing if he is or isn't a vampire.
It makes more sense she keeps insisting if she never sees him in daylight, for example.
And practice writing-skills and/or the english language.
I'd love to see a longer version of this as well.
And perhaps an ending that explained what exactly he is properly.
I'd also love to find the happy ending, but I can't seem to find the choices that make up a happy ending.
And I find it hard to believe that avoiding romantic options could ever lead to anything happy.