Very valid point on how unbothered he seemed, I ended up cutting a line about Gabhammar having to pull himself together before clearing out the captain's chair and I think the story really suffered for it. In general this story's definitely suffered from the amount of lines I had to cut (and planned setups I had to leave unresolved) to get the formatting right. Honestly I feel like I rushed this one too much.
Cheers for the useful feedback!