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Game has a lot of promise (especially in terms of writing and music) but there is one portion which really pulled me out of it.

It may seem minor but the fact that the son refuses to say anything and that dad (or: us) simply goes along with it beggars belief. Dad is an ex-soldier and has a good head on his shoulders and going into a mission without hardly any information is frankly idiotic.

In fact I'd have made the MC give his son an ultimatum: either tell me everything and if I'm still agreed I'll lend you my full support -or- you can go do it on your own and I'll make sure you won't rope in anyone else on your foolish endeavour. Why? Because this makes it more likely his son spills the beans. And because it makes it more likely that if the son doesn't he won't go (because of the risk involved).

I dunno it just feels very out of character especially since the MC has already lost so much. As a dad he's supposed to take care of his son and that includes not doing stupid stuff like that.

Erm. Sorry for the rant. Otherwise, good game so far.

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Now imagine what it would look like in the script? Are there any examples of AVN with such a deep study of the plot, where you can abandon a key decision and still not lose 90% of the content?

Good day Hmm-Hmm. Hope you are doing great, and sorry for late answer.

So, first of all - yes, that's a good point, and the answer is quite simple - a loving person is, by nature, insane. Why? 

For a more detailed explanation, we need to look at the past of our protagonist, and understand who this Lora is. You are a military man who has seen a lot of shit in his short life, and killing has become routine for you.

And it seems like there's no point in moving on with your life. But all that changes with the appearance of one girl, a little ray that could fill that void in your heart, breathing life into your dead soul.

A lot of time has passed, you've grown weary of your past life, and then, one day, that ray of sunshine - disappears. Yes, you may have substitutes, but, can they completely replace it? That's the question. 

And now that you have a chance to get that ray of sunshine back, if you were him, what would you do? Would you go to the meeting, or would you leave everything to fate, living the rest of your life alone?

Yes, definitely, at this point, our MC shows himself to be quite stupid. Instead of asking questions, he blindly followed his hopes, and throughout the whole prologue he acted recklessly. For which, at the end of the prologue, he paid the price. 

(If you know what I mean)  

But it's also done for the future growth of the character, to show what he's become as he makes his decisions. 

(And yes, I'll probably add more variation to this point in the future, you've given me some very interesting thoughts, for which I'm very grateful).