This is a great novel. If you were to add sounds for the spicy scenes, like the MOIST or whatever, this could prolly sell for like 10 bucks at least. Also, just a recommendation, in the cafeteria scenes, you should probably replace those "SODA" bottles. It's a one in 100 chance, but someone could just report you for copyright just to be a dick. Or, an employee plays the game cuz, lets be honest, there's most likely one person at least from corporations that play these games.