It was good. I love your ability to story tell, especially when it come to the Zach Character. If there was one thing that I was disappointed in with this part vs the first part is there was not enough sex. Or even the allure of sex. With the first part you had the complete sexual cat and mouse of the two main characters but you also had the scene where he see's his swimming partner fucking his roommate in the shower. which is the same route you should have taken it " Just how hard did he Mikhail have to work for that open pool door. a little too story driven with this one I get more sexual stuff from my merge nymphs. But other than that it was very good. Just maybe make the next one a little more XXX. :-)
imo That is why Straight?! is so great and sets it apart from the rest. It isn't porn; if you wanted that there are a TON of Japanese VN's out there with little to no dialog to get your rocks off to. Those that do have dialog have atrocious writing, spelling, and grammatical errors as most of them are attempts at translation from Japanese.
I got a lot of feedback like this in the beginning and I specifically went against it for the purpose of the story and I have zero regrets. The concept of the game isn't a porn game first; instead it's a story that chooses to not edit anything out. Allowing for an unfiltered approach to the story content and including adult content allows for limitless storytelling possibilities. It's possible we could do a primarily adult content story in the future but that's not the primary point here. I wanna do something different that purposely stands apart from the rest. The part of the story you like the most is actually my least favorite and thr mostly poorly written. I recently started a reread to start outlining the next part and I feel like the beginning is pretty bad now. Theres only so much you can do with porn scenarios and with the number of games flooding the market, they all have the same reused scenarios. Its definitely not the direction I wanna go. Adding sex into the game at the point where you suggested would have compromised the entire Zack character.