Hey, that was a very promising start! All the characters are great, the script is very well written despite some grammatical errors, visually it looks fantastic, the humor is well done and the genuine character moments hit well, Serahs little moment was really nice. Also wasn't expecting to like Jace as much as I do but he's great, and pretty cute. Kinda giving queer vibes (maybe even transmasc?), and I would be interested in an optional LI path with him. But im aware most people dont come here for that kind of content, and I'll probably like whatever direction you go with even if it is purely friendly. All in all, I'll definitely be keeping an eye on this one, you did a great job with this first part!