Sweet. My own interpretation of the art style, the story and the mood/music was that we were seeing this guy's life through his note book - a sort of Secret Life of Walter Mitty for a down-and-out bagman in an eighties neo-noir. The style is immediately distinctive and it would allow you a great deal of latitude in how you treat your topic. The split between the unreliable narrator VISUALS and the presumably trustworthy audio/text would be really nice.

The only thing I could ask for is perhaps larger interaction hotspots and perhaps fewer overt instructions.

Additionally, gratz on working in Kelo. In truth, he's always there. And he always will be (cheesy horror sting).