That’s a killer first page! And what a wild take on global conspiracy, in the best way. There’s so much here that’s great: the central concept of the Lunatoria, the effect they have on worlds they visit, the bit about dogs (though I’d have loved to see more of the werewolf connection). The photobashed art and background textures really work for this too!
The abstraction of “madness” feels outdated, though I see what you’re going for. I think it would work just as well with a bit more nuance, to make it clear it’s separate from actual mental illness. I really like the idea of “an excess of thought” caused by the Moon being the truth of “lunacy” as the Greeks and other ancients thought of it, though.
Fair enough, though a lot of the bits I could have expanded more fell victim to the 8 page limit. The whole joke of the document is to essentially scream at the top of your lungs "EVERYTHING YOU KNOW IS WRONG" and be left with the conclusion that there's no real way a regular cast of characters could definitively prove that fact. It simultaneously changes everything and nothing, like a real conspiracy theory
Yeah, it works so well on that score! It has an answer for everything, but that everything just confirms what’s already happening, and is all about secrets and things you can’t affect. Love it.
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That’s a killer first page! And what a wild take on global conspiracy, in the best way. There’s so much here that’s great: the central concept of the Lunatoria, the effect they have on worlds they visit, the bit about dogs (though I’d have loved to see more of the werewolf connection). The photobashed art and background textures really work for this too!
The abstraction of “madness” feels outdated, though I see what you’re going for. I think it would work just as well with a bit more nuance, to make it clear it’s separate from actual mental illness. I really like the idea of “an excess of thought” caused by the Moon being the truth of “lunacy” as the Greeks and other ancients thought of it, though.
Fair enough, though a lot of the bits I could have expanded more fell victim to the 8 page limit.
The whole joke of the document is to essentially scream at the top of your lungs "EVERYTHING YOU KNOW IS WRONG" and be left with the conclusion that there's no real way a regular cast of characters could definitively prove that fact. It simultaneously changes everything and nothing, like a real conspiracy theory
Yeah, it works so well on that score! It has an answer for everything, but that everything just confirms what’s already happening, and is all about secrets and things you can’t affect. Love it.