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A jam submission

bouquet de fleuresView project page

flowers

Submitted by Xo (@Xo3sXo) — 8 hours, 43 minutes before the deadline

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Results

Criteria	Rank	Score*	Raw Score
Polish	#6	3.000	3.000
Experimentation	#7	3.250	3.250
Overall	#8	2.700	2.700
Poetry	#9	3.000	3.000
Overall	#9	2.750	2.750
Interactivity	#11	1.500	1.500

Ranked from 4 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.

Name you'd like to be published under, if accepted
Xo

Short bio, written in the third person
I'm Xo, I'm a poet and I know it, I hope I don't blow it!

Artist Statement, about your piece
This is piece is a love letter to my one true love. It is also inaccesible to anyone else, and yet here we are.

What do you need from us, when giving feedback on your piece?
I'd like to know how do you feel having access to something so intimate to me, and what is your interpretation of this work is it still is very obscure to me. I'd also like to know what do you think of this type of very reduced interactivity in the work of art, what does it change from regular poetry, is it's core different as a reader, is a player any different? is an intimate work of art like this any different than any other work of art?

Questions, Comments, Concerns?
This is great rly i love the little discord and the companionship. I dont rly have anything to add, I like that u dont insist in being productive or anything, in making more making it better, i rly like that, idk if it would b to improve it but i d love for the community/discord to remain active and maybe for us to just talk about what we think about art/poetry/or anything rly, but hey if that doesnt happen that's cool too!

Comments

shufpoetryHost2 years ago (1 edit)

Hi Xo!

Thanks for sharing this intimate work! I love that you submitted something that isn't for us, and yet it's still a very beautiful and striking piece. The bouquet in space reminds me of a galaxy, and I'm not sure yet what to make of the different rotation speeds of the earth and the skull. Space-time displacements? Functions of relativity?

I'm not usually a fan of reduced interactivity, but I like how this piece invited me to ponder and slow down, and enjoy something not meant for me. I think this part of the experience intrigued me the most — the looking in on something intimate that's not mine, that I can't truly access. Poetry's forte is sound and symbol, and can exemplify these things in language. This poem (to me) does neither, and instead simply exists as it is; an impressionistic, imagistic poem. It feels different because most poems let you in, some even invite or draw you in, but this is a pristine beauty that I only know as a cusp. Intriguing work.

Thank you for challenging pre-existing notions of poetry, reader/artist relationship, and notions of agency in this piece! I'm going to be thinking about it for a minute. And thanks so much for being active in the Discord! Of course we'll keep it open and active, I hope to be there more once things in my personal life settle down. You rock Xo!!

Here's a little "playthrough" so you can see some live feedback:

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XoDeveloper2 years ago

hello- thank you for the comment and for the jam, it was lovely; I love how much sensibility you put in it, you rock too!

As for the game, there's still some kind of hidden things, some things I did not want to put in the description cuz, well that's part of the whole idea! hihi, I hope to hear more of you, I didn't have much time after the jam but I'm gonna check out the other poems in the jam ;)

Take care, and I hope you do well in your life now <3 have a nice day!!