Judge feedback

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• Realizing that a visual novel’s main selling point is the narrative, it pains me to say that I did not have enough time to let that story grow. Having made it past the first scenario after the Voice’s introduction, I can at least see how the theme “You are the Weapon” is implemented. The introduction was long without really establishing any details that justified it. One example is the banter between the Narrator and Jackie, your character, occurred often enough to become annoying rather than the tension breaker it feels like it was intended to be. There is no tension in the intro, which is good, as it establishes the baseline that the story can descend from into the philosophical dilemma that the story seems to intend toward. Turning to the Game Design Document, while most sections are included, I would have liked to also see in the graphics section examples of the graphical manipulation talked about in that section, and more than a brief overview of the project timeline. In closing, I think that the style and philosophy of the content made this a very fun dip into a world that I had not thought about in a long time in a perspective I could never have known.