I'm trying to leave comments for everyone in the Jam and had some thoughts while reading your one-pager:
1. Nice table of powers!!! You need one more for 100 though.
2. I like the premise. At first I thought the player didn't have any control over their power. Which is something you could introduce in another draft. But I like the idea of just being really great at a thing.
3. Well written GM section. Also congrats on including one. Maybe add a section here about what the goal of a session is. Cause I know who the player and GM are, but want to know what they are trying to do.
4. The mechanics I think would function well. I think you could probably condense this section to a table if you were looking for more space. But I understood what you were attempting to get at.
Those are great thoughts, thanks! I'll see if I can tidy up the mechanics box and flush out the GM role a little. And wrack my brain for one more talent.
Hey! Interesting concept, I like the simplicity of it and that all of those powers are just people being really good at their job. On another note, watch out for the font, it will be illegible for most people.
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Hello Tedbob!
I'm trying to leave comments for everyone in the Jam and had some thoughts while reading your one-pager:
1. Nice table of powers!!! You need one more for 100 though.
2. I like the premise. At first I thought the player didn't have any control over their power. Which is something you could introduce in another draft. But I like the idea of just being really great at a thing.
3. Well written GM section. Also congrats on including one. Maybe add a section here about what the goal of a session is. Cause I know who the player and GM are, but want to know what they are trying to do.
4. The mechanics I think would function well. I think you could probably condense this section to a table if you were looking for more space. But I understood what you were attempting to get at.
Overall, nicely done!
Those are great thoughts, thanks! I'll see if I can tidy up the mechanics box and flush out the GM role a little. And wrack my brain for one more talent.
Hey! Interesting concept, I like the simplicity of it and that all of those powers are just people being really good at their job. On another note, watch out for the font, it will be illegible for most people.
I was thinking the same thing about the font but wasn't sure if it was just me.
Ooh, thanks for mentioning that, I'll see if I can find a more accessible font.