Judge feedback

Judge feedback is anonymous.

• Looks intriguing, but there does not seem to be a playable version available at this point. I would have suggested releasing at least something (e.g., a prologue or a first scene): game jam entries are not expected to be fully-fledged finished games, but rather prototypes and proofs-of-concept that are used to collect feedback, which is then useful when developing them further. - UPDATE: just before the voting ended, I found a link in the description and was able to play the game - although I didn't have time to finish it. Some initial impressions: I enjoyed the overall atmosphere and was intrigued by the premise. The visual aesthetic is interesting but not always very consistent and needs work. The story was rather disjointed and difficult to follow; I imagine this is at least in part on purpose, but there were bits where I couldn't understand the text or the connections between the events in the same scene, and those moments were not very motivating in terms of wanting to continue with the game. Instead of creating a sense of intrigue, there were moments when I just felt confusion - I think some additional work is needed in terms of writing. Speaking of writing, the text also felt like a direct translation from Russian (which I imagine it was), e.g., with the lumpy pancake idiom, which doesn't exist in English. Overall, I think this project has potential but would benefit from further work in terms of writing, narrative design, and visual presentation. Good luck!