Judge feedback

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• The way you created options for players could be more natural. If I take your first passage as an example: You wake up in total darkness, thinking you are at home. But the smell of oil and rust betrays you. You are in an abandoned hangar. Listening carefully, you hear voices: murderers. Option 1: Wait in silence You decide to wait, hoping the murderers don't find you. [[Wait]] Option 2: Explore the hangar You decide to explore, looking for an exit. [[Explore]]. It would have been more natural to do something like this: You wake up in total darkness, thinking you are at home. But the smell of oil and rust betrays you. You are in an abandoned hangar. Listening carefully, you hear voices: murderers. You hesitate between [[waiting]], hoping the murderers don't find you, or [[exploring]] the hangar, looking for an exit. This will make your story easier to read for players. Don't hesitate to integrate options into the text of your story. For example, instead of this: You remain still. Finally, the police burst in and rescue you. [[End: Police]] You could have done this: You remain still. Finally, the police burst in and [[rescue]] you. (and this also reduces the number of words ;-) Be careful with vocabulary. In your story you use the word "hangar", which is a large building in which aircrafts are kept, but from the story it's not clear this is actually what you mean? Also, you can be killed by a stray bullet, but you can't shoot a stray bullet (the shooter doesn't do this on purpose).
• Tbh i don’t understand the game but it was good… Lack of images on the other hand….