Y'all mind if I bounce ideas here? I'm almost 12 pages into a thing, and I want to make sure I'm not getting lost in the sauce.

Is the initial hook in The Pitch document interesting, or does it need more build? I love the idea of a "Yahoo Groups" page talking about a game that was never made, but if you don't want to turn the page, then I need to make some nudges to draw people in better.

I'm very interested in the pitch so far! I'd definitely read more, I really dig the old school forum vibe.

Alright, I have a clean first two acts. I now have a month to decide on the biggie: Do I make a third act, or do I purposefully leave questions?