Hi there! I like how this poem loops, much like my mind does when I am distracted and can't focus. The cover art is beautiful too. If you're ever interested in working more on this piece, I think it might be cool if you (upon each loop) changed the words slightly, or made certain words fall away. Riffs, extensions, iterations around its core idea! Anyway, nice work :)
Hello! I was going through the Twine Poetry Jam entries again, wish I could check this piece out again but I respect that you've taken it down. I hope all is well.
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Hi there! I like how this poem loops, much like my mind does when I am distracted and can't focus. The cover art is beautiful too. If you're ever interested in working more on this piece, I think it might be cool if you (upon each loop) changed the words slightly, or made certain words fall away. Riffs, extensions, iterations around its core idea! Anyway, nice work :)
Hi, thanks for the feedback!
Think I'll leave this one it as is.
I'm working on something else that kinda has some of the things you suggest though, should be finished soon.
The cover art is a photograph that I took (search 'Ghostcache.zip' on Instagram if you wanna see more).
:)
Hello! I was going through the Twine Poetry Jam entries again, wish I could check this piece out again but I respect that you've taken it down. I hope all is well.