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A jam entry

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Illustrated twine about reading
Submitted by Bret Sepulveda (@kittysaysmoo) with 2 days, 22 hours before the deadline

Comments

Jupiter_Hadley · 1 year ago

I really love the little drawings! I included it in part 1 of my ILUJam compilation video series, if you would like to take a look :) https://youtu.be/GoOp32Dlov0

Tophat_Haze · 1 year ago

The second problem with the pacing is with the characters themselves. Since there are only a couple scenes with each one, that means they fell in love over just a few interactions. I know this may be common in romance games, but it's still way to quickly for anyone to fall in love after talking with someone 4-5 times.

And finally, Callie being a book sprite is something I think should have been explained in the beginning, because it would have helped introduce the presence of fantasy/non-human characters in the game.

The other parts of the game are fine. The writing is nice(though I think I saw a few errors here and there), and the illustrations really add to the game as a whole,

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Tophat_Haze · 1 year ago

[Mild spoilers ahead!]

This was quite cute, and the pictures really added to the game. However, there are a few issues.

The first one is the pacing, and I mean this in more ways than 1. First of all, everything happening over the course of 1 day is extremely unbelievable. I would kind of understand if Callie read a book every day, and everything took place in a few day's time, maybe more than a week, though that would still be a bit too quick. However, Callie and someone else falling in love in just 1 day is definitely a bit of a stretch.

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