This is just my review and it's not a reason to fight, so please respond to criticism appropriately.
what's good about the game:
- atmosphere
- models
- narrative design
to be improved:
- story
- script
Description:
- Even the most well-designed game can be ruined by a poorly developed story and script, and this is exactly the case
In the game I saw only one real skrimer at the moment of the first entrance to the building, that's all, I gave a simulator of a cook in fast food
The ending, which does not reach the horror ending, does not justify all the efforts that the player loses on a boring fast food chef simulator
This is an error in the scenario calculations
- The scenario, first of all, feels like the developer didn't know how to keep the player engaged, which gives the feeling that the player is left to himself, uncontrollable by the scenario, which should be avoided by thinking through the scenario more closely. This will allow the developer to control every step of the player, the scriptwriter should know where the player will go and what he will do. Thus, the player is controlled by the scriptwriter, directing him wherever he wants, and this is a good example of a good script. In this case, the game looks "empty" - not filled with events. The game should be fun and engaging.
- It's very difficult to make a story centered on a criminal into a horror game because it's a situation that can be related to reality, and that's not good.
[domestic horror has the following scheme - usual thing + supernatural thing]
In this way we create a vivid contrast that allows us to present usual gray things from a different angle and to create a surreal reality. This is how it works.
The developer wanted to give the impression that the player was killed by a criminal and that hi would use main characters body for burgers and so on, but it doesn't look cool or bright. It looks gray and boring
it does not reward the player for all the boring events of the chef simulator he went through and causes disappointment
I hope this helps
p.s. If the developer is willing, I'm also not averse to working with the developer to create interesting games.
I can create 3D models, work on the plot, script and narrative
Really like the game, the camera placement good and the gameplay smooth. Wish could be longer, probably like more days with little bit more story each day.The one bug i had was after i cleaned up all the trash the next objective wont come out but overall good experience, good job dev.
i love the graphics, the gameplay is amazing. You should work a bit on the tasks since they don't really tell you for example where the warehouse is. Make them a bit more specific.I hope there is going to be more since i really like the game design and the art style.
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NICE GAME!
Those burgers look good
played this not too long ago.
А чо такая короткая
last night she said
''oh,baby, don't feel so down
Oh it turns me off,
When i fell left out".
So I, I turn 'round
"Oh, Baby, gonna be alright".
It was great big lie
'cause i left that night, yeah.
ummm, I still need my tip
Excelente ambientación, me quede con ganas de saber mas de la historia. Nice game!
Game starts at 7:57
CLICK NOW OR UR CRUSH WONT TEXT YOU
11/10 creepyFREE FOOD IS FREE FOOD
Okay, I'll be brief to avoid unnecessary crap
This is just my review and it's not a reason to fight, so please respond to criticism appropriately.
what's good about the game:
- atmosphere
- models
- narrative design
to be improved:
- story
- script
Description:
- Even the most well-designed game can be ruined by a poorly developed story and script, and this is exactly the case
In the game I saw only one real skrimer at the moment of the first entrance to the building, that's all, I gave a simulator of a cook in fast food
The ending, which does not reach the horror ending, does not justify all the efforts that the player loses on a boring fast food chef simulator
This is an error in the scenario calculations
- The scenario, first of all, feels like the developer didn't know how to keep the player engaged, which gives the feeling that the player is left to himself, uncontrollable by the scenario, which should be avoided by thinking through the scenario more closely. This will allow the developer to control every step of the player, the scriptwriter should know where the player will go and what he will do. Thus, the player is controlled by the scriptwriter, directing him wherever he wants, and this is a good example of a good script. In this case, the game looks "empty" - not filled with events. The game should be fun and engaging.
- It's very difficult to make a story centered on a criminal into a horror game because it's a situation that can be related to reality, and that's not good.
[domestic horror has the following scheme - usual thing + supernatural thing]
In this way we create a vivid contrast that allows us to present usual gray things from a different angle and to create a surreal reality. This is how it works.
The developer wanted to give the impression that the player was killed by a criminal and that hi would use main characters body for burgers and so on, but it doesn't look cool or bright. It looks gray and boring
it does not reward the player for all the boring events of the chef simulator he went through and causes disappointment
I hope this helps
p.s. If the developer is willing, I'm also not averse to working with the developer to create interesting games.
I can create 3D models, work on the plot, script and narrative
A fun short horror game! Love the music on the radio, but still raging from the cars honking at me 🤣
Really like the game, the camera placement good and the gameplay smooth. Wish could be longer, probably like more days with little bit more story each day.The one bug i had was after i cleaned up all the trash the next objective wont come out but overall good experience, good job dev.
En vez de asustarme creo que mas me la pase preparando hamburguesas JAJAJA, buen juego "corto pero entretenido"
Disfrútenlo.
juego bastante bueno, aunque es corto, tiene una temática y una historia muy buena.
tiempo de juego de aprox 10 mins
buena ambientacion, sonido y jugabilidad.
me gusto mucho 10/10
Loved It!
My burger went into the backrooms
j'ai eu peur, je ne sais pas comment .... sympa petit jeu
i love the graphics, the gameplay is amazing. You should work a bit on the tasks since they don't really tell you for example where the warehouse is. Make them a bit more specific.I hope there is going to be more since i really like the game design and the art style.
that was fun, reminded me of happy humble burger farm. i was wishing for more.
Loved your game. I still don't understand how I got scared but I did.
Great, little horror game! Nice work!
Was a bit confused and nearly got a heart attack xD
Hey man, great indie short game, I really enjoy it playing it :)
I downloaded the game but it asking for some short of app wht do I need? Please help
Cool short indie first jumpscare was unexpected
Would Love to see more
nice
What a great little horror game! It was a blast to play!!