The writing is exquisite. And I actually like that you kept the presentation minimal, only adding text colouring when it really enhanced the story.
And what a story! I too loved the intentional indirectness and the lush mystery that created. It made the gradual realisation spectacularly hard hitting. I don't think I'd be overstating it to say that, compared to the rest of the entries, this is the most powerful use of 300 words.
Unlike norbez, however, I got the impression that the pc was in fact the father? Curious to know if I'm right.
Thanks so much for the kind words, Norbez. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
The all-black word is intentionally blank. You can click on it though, to read the final line in the story.
*Comment contains some spoilers. So if you haven't played the game, play it before reading.*
WOW. This writing is excellent. Top-notch job here. I think the narrator's father died? I'm not too sure. The air of mystery is wonderfully created and sustained. This is wonderful work. The only thing is: the final word can't be seen at all. I get that each word was darker and darker, but the last one seems to be completely black. I don't know if that was on purpose. It didn't take away from my experience, though. Great work!
(I'm also in this Twiny Jam, btw. My game is HCF.)
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