At first, I was hesitant to play this because it wasn't something I had played before, but the art drew me in!
And when I started playing, I was surprised by the writing and how many options the game offered. I'm excited to see how the story will develop and how our relationships will deepen!
My favourite right now is our dear deity of the sun, can't wait to spend more time with them <3
Everyone kept offering me food and I love them for it, omg. And Luciel did mainly catch my attention when I was browsing the page for the first time, but then Salvatore?! Anyway Luciel, beloved, let me open your heart so we could sit right next to each other!
Edit: Okay, been replaying a bit since I can't get enough and MC happily (also giddily) enjoying Ciocana's surprise antics and not thinking ill of them was actually cute. Makes me excited to see more of Ciocana (and Alessi too, the intrigue!)
Looking forward to any progress as it's such a treat, absolutely loved it and it was really fascinating (that includes MC's lore, you could really feel it + wholesome adorable Dads despite everything) so thank you for your hard work, Mistyrious!
Ahh sarkazwho!! Thank you so much for the lovely words, I am so happy that you liked the characters! I will of course continue working on it so I can hopefully make you happy! Thank you again! ❤️
Nauuuur it's all good, you know! I'm already really grateful and happy that you created such a wonderful world (and characters!) Read through all the RO asks, and it's been quite rent free fr so Luciel better lock Lucidio's entrance since I'm ready to hunt them down to give adoration😤 Still, please take your time and stay bongga as always while at it✨
I am genuinely so invested in this game. It's so good and leaves you curious for more by the end of the chapter. Please, for the love of God, make more of it.
LOVING this story. It's unbelievably satisfying to have so many choices to dictate the tone of the player character. I like adapting one of my more harsh/cold OCs into games like this and rarely do they have so many options to accommodate her personality!!
Really beautiful writing, fascinating worldbuilding, and overall game. Very intriguing plot. Can't wait for chapter 2!!
Hi Addered! I am so glad that you feel that you have many options for that kind of character! I feel that such a character has amazing potential for the kind of story I want to tell; exploring the different personalities of MC sprung from how they responded to their circumstances growing up has been immensely satisfying. I hope to continue to accommodate for them!
Hi Aiedaeil! My game personally will never be put up for a price, so please be assured. However, the vast majority of other authors with the same medium will and have monetized their stories upon completion, to success. Thank you so much for your interest again! ♥️
I was looking for good stories to read on itch.io, and I finally found one!
This story not only had amazing imagery, but finally I found a story with more diverse choices! No more 'I'm sad' 'I'm mad' 'I don't answer' nonsense, this story even has 'I'm mad but i'ma joke about it' and it's amazing!
This story is a work of art, and I can't wait too see more!
I do have a quick comment that the 'X' button when you look at something is like right at the end of the screen, I wish there was some padding around it.
I also wish when the setting is picked to choose genders as I go, I wish the default selected was the intended gender, instead of always being 'they,' I feel this would allow us to keep it faithful to the intent but allow us to change some things around as we please.
Also sometimes the OpenDyslexic font doesn't work properly, and I have to reload the page to fix it.
Hi Goose, thanks so much for the feedback!! I'm glad you liked the diversity in the choices <3 I wasn't sure if it was going overboard to have such choices; I wish there was a way to accommodate a wide range of responses without filling the screen with links! Alas, it'd feel too gamey if the choices were in a dropdown box of all things. :)
I am sorry about the X button! A lot of styling for the game was done when I was still quite amateurish with Twine, so I will look out for that <3
Secondly, I had initially written so that the canon language did not actually have any pronouns besides "they/them"... until I realized that would then defeat the purpose of selecting your pronouns! As cool as it would have been, it came with it a slew of issues. I would say "they/them" is the closest to intent. :) Before adding the gender variables, I refer to all of them simply by they/them in writing!
Lastly, sorry for the font issue! I think I have a clue why that is, which is related to why font sizes initially didn't work great at first either :S so I will also investigate that further! Thank you so much for letting me know <3
Once again, thanks again for considering everything and taking the time to let me know your thoughts. I promise it is immensely helpful, and I strive to incorporate them ♥️♥️
Hey! I really enjoyed this story, and can't wait to see where you take this!
I get the pronouns thing, that makes sense! Choosing pronouns in writing is challenging to say the least, and I am just glad to see representation with xe/xem and ey/em pronouns, as well as fully customizable pronouns sheet! It really shows that you care and support your fans, and it allows for more diversity between stories!
I'm not [diagnosed] dyslexic, so I can't know for sure, but I do know reading is difficult, but the font issue wasn't a huge inconvenience, because of how easy it was to fix ( I just pressed refresh XD ).
I really loved the end of the chapter, that twist was incredible, and really shows a layer of depth to the story that many writers don't incorporate until later in the story, and shows you care about the context and emotion behind the scenes!
Overall, this story was beautifully (took me 4 tries before I spelled that right) crafted and incredibly immersive, and I loved every moment of it! Keep up the amazing work!
On the note of pronouns/language since you bring up the canon language perhaps only having 'they', I spent a while working on a more gender inclusive language a while back and came up with a neat idea. Read if you wanna (its long, sorry).
The basic idea takes the concept of keigo - literally translated to respectful language, it's the Japanese grammatical structure for adding respect/formality. The language would have several different levels of formality, for the purposes of pronouns we only really need 2 however so I'll only go into the 2 we need.
First, the "standard" formality. This is the formality you would use with strangers, coworkers, bosses, etc. In a more fleshed out language there might be more formalities above this, but they all would treat pronouns essentially the same as the standard. All pronouns in the standard formality are agender. The closest English translation would probably be they/them although that doesn't convey the true absence of gender that standard formality has. It is simply nongendered.
Second, we have the "familiar" formality. This is the formality you would use for close friends, family, etc. In this formality you do have a number of explicitly gendered pronouns, ranging from the standard masculine/feminine, to various neutral/nongendered pronouns, to even perhaps a number of different "gradient" pronouns for different mixes of gender identity. And finally of course someone can always choose to retain the truly genderless pronouns of standard formality should they prefer a more truly "agender" option.
The idea is that when speaking to strangers - and in situations where you need to be respectful and formal - gender is entirely absent. Thus there is not really a risk of misgendering a stranger without learning their preferred pronouns. Then when two people become close enough, they will switch to their familiar pronouns and thus affirm each other through their language as a sign of their closeness.
Since exchanging familiar pronouns is baked into the structure of the language, it becomes a natural part of introducing oneself. An English approximate would be like introducing yourself as "X, familiarly Y - xe/xer" or even simplified to "X, Y - xe" where X is one's family name/formal name/title and Y is one's personal name. For my MC it would be like introducing her as "The Eye, Lyria - she". It also implies some rude, culturally significant ways to introduce oneself like only introducing their formal title without their familiar pronouns and name thus implying that they do not intend to let you get close to them.
This makes a language that makes no default assumptions about a stranger's gender, but still retains gender expression and affirmation through language. Furthermore I think it canonizes gender affirmation as something more intimate and friendly, a sign of respect and friendship.
Sorry if that was a bit long and rambly but I am a language nerd, couldn't pass up the opportunity to talk about pronouns and gender inclusivity in fictional languages. Hope it was an interesting read at least.
That was a FASCINATING read, I am so grateful!! I wanted to hearken back to my own native tongue because all its pronouns are entirely neutral, only that we add an extra word in our sentences to denote politeness or formality.
Knowing this, I think I can make it canon! ❤️ My one sadness is that some stories or IFs automatically already know the neopronouns of the MC without asking. I think it's great that they already include them, and there is no harm in that at all! But I think it would make it more real this way.
So I can picture the MC and a new character introducing themselves and using gender neutral pronouns until they've become familiar or simply ask the other to refer to them properly if they dislike being formal or being referred to by anything else. Great!
Thank you so much -- this is a great compromise to allowing flexibility in gender expression for the protagonist, and yet also incorporating the neutrality in the language that I intended! You have singlehandedly saved the language. Thank you, Hexling! ❤️
I loved it. Absolutely loved it. One of the small portion of games I actually really read!! Didn't regret a single moment of the game from download to impressed while closing it to check the comments at the end. Can't wait for Ch.2!! Need more like dis
Thank you so much ratlover!!! 🥺🥺♥️♥️ I also have a hard time really reading, so it is such a high honor to know you gave your attention to it. Thank you so much for your kind words :)
Hi PlayCharacter!! I keep forgetting to write explicitly that it's a demo and misleading other people, since I thought marking it as in development was enough -- I am a fool (I just now edited the game page)! Thank you so much for checking it out anyway, and I hope to bring you the next chapter so soon! Thank you so so much for dropping a comment as well! 💓
Just finished and I love it so much! I forgot this was a demo and got so immersed that I was shooked when I reached the end 🗣️ Also, I want to say more but I fear it will only end up in incomprehensible keyboard smash gushing so 🕴️
Thank you and I'll be looking forward for the next chapter! Oh, and happy new year!
Hi cocorunchz, thanks so much for dropping a comment!! 🥺🥺💓💓 I am so happy that it ended up being immersive, and I completely welcome the keyboard smashing!! And happy happy New Year to you too 💕 thank you so much again!
I played through this last night and I really enjoyed it! The setting has a fantastic atmosphere that's beautiful and slightly eerie, and I'm intrigued by the characters! I'm excited about this, thank you for making it!
Oh no! I will have to investigate that ASAP -- it used to lead to an online demo for the macro, but it seems I can't find it online anymore. Thanks for calling it to my attention!!
I really enjoyed the Demo + Chp 1. Very intriguing. Clever integration of character creation & choosing the identity of some of the characters. I assume we're waiting for chp 2, and not that I just don't know where to find it?
Haha, yes, Chapter 2 is not out yet! I forgot some people who come across the game don't come from Tumblr, so they may be unaware of how far the demo goes! Either way, thank you so much!! I always prefer the customization of the character to be integrated into the story, rather than thrown at you from the beginning! ❤️❤️
the dialogue and description is so good, it has me speechless? ??? i love the premise and the navigation between the story and the different branches and the layouts are gorgeous?? i'm so looking forward to more! it's been a while since i've been able to immerse myself into a character.
This game is absolutely FIRE!!! Words are not enough to describe the just how much I adore this already!! Will definitely be following along and cannot wait for what else u have in store, its already so promising!!!
AAAA your enthusiasm is so infectious, thank you so so much for taking the time just to let me know your excitement! It makes me excited just to write it knowing someone like you will be following it!! Thank you so much again ImSooprCereal, you're the sweetest! 💕💕
This entire story is absolutely beautiful. I love all of the characters, the writing style is fantastic, and the MC customization is actually so freeing. Thank you for making this, I enjoyed every single word of it!
!!!! Thank you so much picklenugget1, that is so gratifying and awesome to hear. Ironically, those are all the things I feared about the story, so I'm so stoked to hear you liek them!! ;A; Again, thank you so much for leaving a comment, that means the world to me!!
Hina, I'm so glad you think so!! <3 I love stat-heavy games, but I think I always get bogged down trying to maximize them. I even go so far as to try to "maximize" my relationship points with characters that I completely throw roleplaying out the window! I hope you won't have to feel this way in the future. Thanks so much again for taking the time to comment something lovely :)
WHOAGH WHAT THIS IS SO COOL ACTUALLY I LOVE IT SHAKES AND FALLS OVER??? WHAT!! I ADORE THE CHARACTERS AND THE WORLDBUILDING SO FAR THE CONCEPT MAKES ME FEEL SO /POS!
KAKDKS your enthusiasm is AAA 😭💕 thank you so much Kk_sys, I'm so glad the characters and the story inspired positive feelings, as it does in me! I've chosen some of my favorite aesthetics to incorporate into the game!
Again, thank you thank you for your excitement!! 🫂💕💕
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At first, I was hesitant to play this because it wasn't something I had played before, but the art drew me in!
And when I started playing, I was surprised by the writing and how many options the game offered. I'm excited to see how the story will develop and how our relationships will deepen!
My favourite right now is our dear deity of the sun, can't wait to spend more time with them <3
Everyone kept offering me food and I love them for it, omg. And Luciel did mainly catch my attention when I was browsing the page for the first time, but then Salvatore?! Anyway Luciel, beloved, let me open your heart so we could sit right next to each other!
Edit: Okay, been replaying a bit since I can't get enough and MC happily (also giddily) enjoying Ciocana's surprise antics and not thinking ill of them was actually cute. Makes me excited to see more of Ciocana (and Alessi too, the intrigue!)
Looking forward to any progress as it's such a treat, absolutely loved it and it was really fascinating (that includes MC's lore, you could really feel it + wholesome adorable Dads despite everything) so thank you for your hard work, Mistyrious!
Ahh sarkazwho!! Thank you so much for the lovely words, I am so happy that you liked the characters! I will of course continue working on it so I can hopefully make you happy! Thank you again! ❤️
Nauuuur it's all good, you know! I'm already really grateful and happy that you created such a wonderful world (and characters!) Read through all the RO asks, and it's been quite rent free fr so Luciel better lock Lucidio's entrance since I'm ready to hunt them down to give adoration😤 Still, please take your time and stay bongga as always while at it✨
I am genuinely so invested in this game. It's so good and leaves you curious for more by the end of the chapter. Please, for the love of God, make more of it.
Your comment has been extremely motivating in ways that I cannot explain. Thank you so much, paper albatross!!
I need more pleaseeeeeee
Ahhh I want to write more too! Hopefully I can get it to you soon ❤️ thank you Boing Boingg!
LOVING this story. It's unbelievably satisfying to have so many choices to dictate the tone of the player character. I like adapting one of my more harsh/cold OCs into games like this and rarely do they have so many options to accommodate her personality!!
Really beautiful writing, fascinating worldbuilding, and overall game. Very intriguing plot. Can't wait for chapter 2!!
Hi Addered! I am so glad that you feel that you have many options for that kind of character! I feel that such a character has amazing potential for the kind of story I want to tell; exploring the different personalities of MC sprung from how they responded to their circumstances growing up has been immensely satisfying. I hope to continue to accommodate for them!
Thank you so so much for your lovely words ❤️
Cant wait for chapter 2!
Thank you, London!! ❤️❤️ I hope to bring it to you soon!
I love the story line. Your not gonna put this up for money are you? :(
i really enjoy the game and yes money it's deserved but many wouldn't play maybe like a tip thingy? i dunno it's a good game.
Hi Aiedaeil! My game personally will never be put up for a price, so please be assured. However, the vast majority of other authors with the same medium will and have monetized their stories upon completion, to success. Thank you so much for your interest again! ♥️
No worries i love the game! and the art :)
I was looking for good stories to read on itch.io, and I finally found one!
This story not only had amazing imagery, but finally I found a story with more diverse choices! No more 'I'm sad' 'I'm mad' 'I don't answer' nonsense, this story even has 'I'm mad but i'ma joke about it' and it's amazing!
This story is a work of art, and I can't wait too see more!
I do have a quick comment that the 'X' button when you look at something is like right at the end of the screen, I wish there was some padding around it.
I also wish when the setting is picked to choose genders as I go, I wish the default selected was the intended gender, instead of always being 'they,' I feel this would allow us to keep it faithful to the intent but allow us to change some things around as we please.
Also sometimes the OpenDyslexic font doesn't work properly, and I have to reload the page to fix it.
Hi Goose, thanks so much for the feedback!! I'm glad you liked the diversity in the choices <3 I wasn't sure if it was going overboard to have such choices; I wish there was a way to accommodate a wide range of responses without filling the screen with links! Alas, it'd feel too gamey if the choices were in a dropdown box of all things. :)
I am sorry about the X button! A lot of styling for the game was done when I was still quite amateurish with Twine, so I will look out for that <3
Secondly, I had initially written so that the canon language did not actually have any pronouns besides "they/them"... until I realized that would then defeat the purpose of selecting your pronouns! As cool as it would have been, it came with it a slew of issues. I would say "they/them" is the closest to intent. :) Before adding the gender variables, I refer to all of them simply by they/them in writing!
Lastly, sorry for the font issue! I think I have a clue why that is, which is related to why font sizes initially didn't work great at first either :S so I will also investigate that further! Thank you so much for letting me know <3
Once again, thanks again for considering everything and taking the time to let me know your thoughts. I promise it is immensely helpful, and I strive to incorporate them ♥️♥️
Hey! I really enjoyed this story, and can't wait to see where you take this!
I get the pronouns thing, that makes sense! Choosing pronouns in writing is challenging to say the least, and I am just glad to see representation with xe/xem and ey/em pronouns, as well as fully customizable pronouns sheet! It really shows that you care and support your fans, and it allows for more diversity between stories!
I'm not [diagnosed] dyslexic, so I can't know for sure, but I do know reading is difficult, but the font issue wasn't a huge inconvenience, because of how easy it was to fix ( I just pressed refresh XD ).
I really loved the end of the chapter, that twist was incredible, and really shows a layer of depth to the story that many writers don't incorporate until later in the story, and shows you care about the context and emotion behind the scenes!
Overall, this story was beautifully (took me 4 tries before I spelled that right) crafted and incredibly immersive, and I loved every moment of it! Keep up the amazing work!
On the note of pronouns/language since you bring up the canon language perhaps only having 'they', I spent a while working on a more gender inclusive language a while back and came up with a neat idea. Read if you wanna (its long, sorry).
The basic idea takes the concept of keigo - literally translated to respectful language, it's the Japanese grammatical structure for adding respect/formality. The language would have several different levels of formality, for the purposes of pronouns we only really need 2 however so I'll only go into the 2 we need.
The idea is that when speaking to strangers - and in situations where you need to be respectful and formal - gender is entirely absent. Thus there is not really a risk of misgendering a stranger without learning their preferred pronouns. Then when two people become close enough, they will switch to their familiar pronouns and thus affirm each other through their language as a sign of their closeness.
Since exchanging familiar pronouns is baked into the structure of the language, it becomes a natural part of introducing oneself. An English approximate would be like introducing yourself as "X, familiarly Y - xe/xer" or even simplified to "X, Y - xe" where X is one's family name/formal name/title and Y is one's personal name. For my MC it would be like introducing her as "The Eye, Lyria - she". It also implies some rude, culturally significant ways to introduce oneself like only introducing their formal title without their familiar pronouns and name thus implying that they do not intend to let you get close to them.
This makes a language that makes no default assumptions about a stranger's gender, but still retains gender expression and affirmation through language. Furthermore I think it canonizes gender affirmation as something more intimate and friendly, a sign of respect and friendship.
Sorry if that was a bit long and rambly but I am a language nerd, couldn't pass up the opportunity to talk about pronouns and gender inclusivity in fictional languages. Hope it was an interesting read at least.
Hi Hexling,
That was a FASCINATING read, I am so grateful!! I wanted to hearken back to my own native tongue because all its pronouns are entirely neutral, only that we add an extra word in our sentences to denote politeness or formality.
Knowing this, I think I can make it canon! ❤️ My one sadness is that some stories or IFs automatically already know the neopronouns of the MC without asking. I think it's great that they already include them, and there is no harm in that at all! But I think it would make it more real this way.
So I can picture the MC and a new character introducing themselves and using gender neutral pronouns until they've become familiar or simply ask the other to refer to them properly if they dislike being formal or being referred to by anything else. Great!
Thank you so much -- this is a great compromise to allowing flexibility in gender expression for the protagonist, and yet also incorporating the neutrality in the language that I intended! You have singlehandedly saved the language. Thank you, Hexling! ❤️
Glad you liked it and it clicked some things into place for you!
I loved it. Absolutely loved it. One of the small portion of games I actually really read!! Didn't regret a single moment of the game from download to impressed while closing it to check the comments at the end. Can't wait for Ch.2!! Need more like dis
Thank you so much ratlover!!! 🥺🥺♥️♥️ I also have a hard time really reading, so it is such a high honor to know you gave your attention to it. Thank you so much for your kind words :)
This game is amazing.
I was so into the game, and realised that it was JUST a demo. Thank you for this game, I'll be waiting for the next chapter with glee and gyrate.
Hi PlayCharacter!! I keep forgetting to write explicitly that it's a demo and misleading other people, since I thought marking it as in development was enough -- I am a fool (I just now edited the game page)! Thank you so much for checking it out anyway, and I hope to bring you the next chapter so soon! Thank you so so much for dropping a comment as well! 💓
Just finished and I love it so much! I forgot this was a demo and got so immersed that I was shooked when I reached the end 🗣️ Also, I want to say more but I fear it will only end up in incomprehensible keyboard smash gushing so 🕴️
Thank you and I'll be looking forward for the next chapter! Oh, and happy new year!
Hi cocorunchz, thanks so much for dropping a comment!! 🥺🥺💓💓 I am so happy that it ended up being immersive, and I completely welcome the keyboard smashing!! And happy happy New Year to you too 💕 thank you so much again!
I played through this last night and I really enjoyed it! The setting has a fantastic atmosphere that's beautiful and slightly eerie, and I'm intrigued by the characters! I'm excited about this, thank you for making it!
Thank you, Leon!! I am so grateful to you for taking the time to read my writing as well 💕💕 it means more to me than you can know!
I know there's only one chapter, but this one is my favorite Interactive! Really looking forward to where it goes! (Ciocana has my heart already)
!!! That's extremely high praise Puufi, thank you so much!! I hope not to disappoint you 🥺💖
i'll be waiting for chap. 2! this was a very well made game <3
Hi astra!! Thank you so much for your sweet comment <3!!!
Hey. The HiEv link in your credits seems to be hacked and leads to a security alert.
Oh no! I will have to investigate that ASAP -- it used to lead to an online demo for the macro, but it seems I can't find it online anymore. Thanks for calling it to my attention!!
I really enjoyed the Demo + Chp 1. Very intriguing. Clever integration of character creation & choosing the identity of some of the characters. I assume we're waiting for chp 2, and not that I just don't know where to find it?
Keep up the good work!
Haha, yes, Chapter 2 is not out yet! I forgot some people who come across the game don't come from Tumblr, so they may be unaware of how far the demo goes! Either way, thank you so much!! I always prefer the customization of the character to be integrated into the story, rather than thrown at you from the beginning! ❤️❤️
Thanks again, Kiljek! 💕
I just want to let you know that we're looking forward to the chapter 2 <3
🥹🥹 thank you ziye ❤️❤️❤️
the dialogue and description is so good, it has me speechless? ??? i love the premise and the navigation between the story and the different branches and the layouts are gorgeous?? i'm so looking forward to more! it's been a while since i've been able to immerse myself into a character.
AAAA thank you so much playerlou!! Your words mean more to me than I can say 🥹 I'm glad you were able to be so immersed!
is it wrong to say that i'm a sucker for ciocana? 😩
Not at all, I am too!
Absolutely not! 💕
Love it so much I cry a alot for the mc D:
🥺🥺 I'm sorry to make you feel this way for the MC!! Hopefully they will earn everyone's respect soon 💕
This game is absolutely FIRE!!! Words are not enough to describe the just how much I adore this already!! Will definitely be following along and cannot wait for what else u have in store, its already so promising!!!
AAAA your enthusiasm is so infectious, thank you so so much for taking the time just to let me know your excitement! It makes me excited just to write it knowing someone like you will be following it!! Thank you so much again ImSooprCereal, you're the sweetest! 💕💕
salvatore i will actually die for you
Salvatore would for you 💕
This entire story is absolutely beautiful. I love all of the characters, the writing style is fantastic, and the MC customization is actually so freeing. Thank you for making this, I enjoyed every single word of it!
!!!! Thank you so much picklenugget1, that is so gratifying and awesome to hear. Ironically, those are all the things I feared about the story, so I'm so stoked to hear you liek them!! ;A; Again, thank you so much for leaving a comment, that means the world to me!!
Wow! I was impressed!! I liked that there were no stats for a change. It really gave me more freedom in choosing from the choices.
Hina, I'm so glad you think so!! <3 I love stat-heavy games, but I think I always get bogged down trying to maximize them. I even go so far as to try to "maximize" my relationship points with characters that I completely throw roleplaying out the window! I hope you won't have to feel this way in the future. Thanks so much again for taking the time to comment something lovely :)
Yes! Yes! I get you a lot! I like stat-heavy games too, but sometimes, I want to mix it up with games like this.
WHOAGH WHAT THIS IS SO COOL ACTUALLY I LOVE IT SHAKES AND FALLS OVER??? WHAT!! I ADORE THE CHARACTERS AND THE WORLDBUILDING SO FAR THE CONCEPT MAKES ME FEEL SO /POS!
KAKDKS your enthusiasm is AAA 😭💕 thank you so much Kk_sys, I'm so glad the characters and the story inspired positive feelings, as it does in me! I've chosen some of my favorite aesthetics to incorporate into the game!
Again, thank you thank you for your excitement!! 🫂💕💕
HOW COULD I NOT BE EXCITED WITH THIS KINDA STUFF ITS SO PRETTY AND FUN GHJDGJDHW
THANK YOU FOR THE GAME!!!
RAGH