Out Of The Blue (hiatus)

The current demo abruptly ends just as it was about to get started, which is very unfortunate, since the premise appeals even to those of us who do not enjoy authors like Jane Austen.

Given its length (short) and status (hiatus), it feels odd to give feedback, even though it was explicitly requested. Specifically, you asked for feedback on where the MC comes across as too feminine, what additional choices would allow better representation, and whether anything was ignorant:

• The eagerness to go above and beyond in terms of self-isolating, social distancing and masking outdoors in response to some government warnings, is laid on so thick that it's jarring.
• There isn't a single STEM-major among the choices.
• Theo calling you "babe", "sweetie" and "honey" feels strange if you aren't playing a feminine type.
• The best place for tattoos, the beautiful large canvas that is your back, is missing!

Hopefully, this feedback will inspire and encourage you, rather than making it more daunting to come back to the project. But if not, just ignore it, and focus on your achievement of appealing to an Austen-hater :p

I'm always coming back for you (This IF)

I love the premise of this game! I'm honestly a sucker for anything Jane Austen related, so this is a really fun premise and I'm excited to see more!!

Looking forward to your next update!

i’m hooked can’t wait for an update but make sure to take your time

First of all, I LOVED this demo!! I'm totally hooked to the story and I can't wait to see what happens next! Normally, I wouldn't do this but since you so kindly asked for feedback, I have a few small suggestions to what would make this story even better.

Generally, the writing was very well done, however at one point you use the phrase "Gleam some inspiration" when I'm fairly sure the word is actually 'glean'- a very easy mistake to make but if you're keen on making it as grammatically correct as possible, this would be a great place to start!

As a trans person, I enjoyed how customizable the character options were, but i wonder weather it's entirely necessary to have seperate options to weather a character is male/female or male/female but assigned another gender at birth. Having these as different options could appear to imply that a cis man/woman is a completly different identity to being a trans man/woman, which isn't necessarily true, especially when the wording asks 'what you identify as'. Unless it'll become a key plot point later on in the story, I think it would be best to just have female, male and nonbinary options in the future. Then again, this is a very nitpicky criticism which I'm sure most people wouldn't notice. I'm also only one guy speaking for a huge community and perhaps not everyone will agree with me.

Thank you, for making such a wonderful story and I wish you all the best in finishing it :)

aaa im hookeedd i love the customisation!! i hope to see the next chapterrs <3

Hi! Im obsessed, this is just amazing so far. Welll done!!! 

I just wanted to hear if this story is still in progress, is it gonna happen or is it scraped. Obviously its not finished but i want to know if i should look forward to a update or just be thankful for what we have experienced. 

Xxx

SOOOOO GOOOD