The ending where you leave made me cry I wish things worked out the two made a perfect couple and the ending where he stayed was probably somewhat the right ending but I wish there where some way to save colin/jeffry
Love this VN! Thank you so much for turning my always-dreaming fantasy into such a work! Background music also Great!
(spoiler)
Somehow before Ted mentioned his eye color, I instinctively have a feeling about his identity, so I'm not that surprised when he tells the truth. <3 Maybe that's the reason why I foolishly follow him into that world in the first place. And I notice Caijoru changes into Ted's clothes, which makes me feel really bittersweet. While waiting, I furiously imagine what adventures they have, what stories they share, just to linger so the end won't come so fast...
For another route, I appreciate the shift of viewpoint, and Sean is a good listener! Really want to know more about Caijoru's past!
I'm not great at putting my thoughts into words or writing long comments but I just gotta say that I absolutely love this VN! I found it about a week ago and I've been obsessed ever since, it's very quickly become my favorite VN.
Also Jeffrey is honestly a really relatable character for me, I like him a lot.~
I eagerly and patiently look forward to every future update.~
Hello, I liked your novel very much, the horror genre I like very much. I'm a translator from Russia, and I'm part of a project that translates short stories for Russian mortals, and I'd really like to translate your short story into Russian, can I do that?
(Major Ending Spoilers And Personal Mistakes Were Made) Okay. Honestly this game caught me very much by surprise, it end up sitting around on my computer for quite some time before I actually got to it... I unintentionally reading this game while I was depressed (don't worry, I ended up feeling humbled by my choices if that make sense)
Very well done on the writing and despite it being somewhat short I found it enjoyable to read and able to get more emotion out of me than a decent amount of others.
I know that there are different routes, although I do not know to what extent (I guess 3 currently with one or more in the works?) feel free to correct me if I'm wrong.
I look forward to seeing where this goes.. and who knows we might even end up with another VN
I had ended up with "two endings", as I got curious and decided to change my last choice.. my first and the one I honestly prefer wait with Caijoru as that's where I got being honest on my first run.
My second.. self-sacrifice just thought it needed mentioning, (those that have gone through it would know why) needless to say not a fan of that "ending" but hey that's what I get for being curious so yeah :P.
However I think it's best that I don't read anymore this until I'm out of this funk. Keep up the great work and ignore my dyslexia if there any spelling mistakes (if this gets deleted I understand why so no hard feelings. Just figured I would make an attempt to show some support) <3
Thanks for letting me know how you thought of the story! I'm glad you've enjoyed it. I'm sorry to hear that you're struggling with depression though. That's rough :/ I hope things go better for you soon.
In regards to routes, there are 7, though two of them haven't been started yet. If you accept Caijoru's offer in the dream, it splits off into two routes from there. One for Ted and one for Daren. If you keep rejecting his offer then it will split off into 5 routes. Ted, Daren, Marshall, Tracy, and Sean.
(some major ending spoilers) Okay, but more seriously, is there a twitter or anything to follow to stay up to date on news regarding FbI? No rush, of course, on updates of any kind.
This is just such a good VN and it shot up to one of my favorites so quickly. Definitely top 5, maybe top 3??? There's so much to say but it's also hard to put into words. I love the Ted reveal and the feeling of straight dread, shock, and betrayal when we got FUCKING PAVLOV'D INTO KILLING SOMEONE...I just needed a couple minutes to process that because...just woah but also what?!?!??!? That moment was just so powerful...
The power dynamic shift especially coming right after that was such a good little bit of vengeance, but also terrifying and further dread inducing as I imagined being stuck as merely a passenger as the curse did as it pleased. The unnerving music was great but also kinda grew to be fun listening music. But overall it was just such a satisfying ending that I'm eager to see what else can happen in other routes. Looking forward to Daren route stuff!
I'm glad you've enjoyed it! It's always cool hearing what people think about the VN and the story, so thanks for sharing ^^
As far as news about FbI goes, I've just got the devlogs that I post here. I haven't had too much I could say recently cause I've been mostly dealing with health issues, but I am at a point where I can start working more on writing again!
I really didn't expected it to be this good, I knew that it would be good, but not that much, the waiting ending was very unexpected and really made me feel sad, it's really sad how the story unfolded, I really liked it, it's a shame that (spoiler) there's no continuation of what happened to them or if caijoru's brother came back or not, but still I really liked the opening that it makes for anyone continuing the story as they want, but yea I really liked the vn
Just finished all three accept route endings! Just.. wow. W o w. Your writing is reaaaaally good. The music is real good as well! I think I remember something about the music being done by you (or at least made for the game), is that true? The music is stellar and hits all the right spots at the right moments!
I really like the vn so much =w= really love the relationship between ted and jeffrey, the ending is very good and very.. well won't say it XD after all i rating this 5/5 stars can't wait for the update X3
Since Caijoru can be in someone's dream and control Ted at the same time, that probably means Jeffrey getting scratched in the reject route wasn't caused by the dream, he just got scratched by Ted.
It should be fixed now. I've replaced the old android download with the new one.
Ended up taking a lot longer than I thought to fix ^^' And unfortunately Ren'py's android emulator isn't that good since it doesn't show the actual screen size.
Anyways, let me know if there are any further issues!
This is an excellent game. The core characters are really well-written and the plot is very engaging. It was a great idea to give Jeffery such a large range of expressions. He really comes across as a fully animated, living character with constantly shifting emotions. Daren is such a great bro.
I was also very impressed by your realistic portrayal of mental illness in a obviously flawed and self-destructive yet lovable main character.
The game is very well made. The music is decent, the characters are fantastic, and the plot is fairly good. The only quall I have with the game is its length. When the Accept route was finished, I was left wondering if that was really the end of the game or if I had just done something I shouldn't have. While it being short isn't necessarily a bad thing, it just felt like this game was setting up way more than it actually offered. Other than that, it's definitely a good VN!
I've been on a (furry) horror/depresso VN binge since finishing Echo and playing through what's available of its prequels and sequels. I'm enjoying this VN so far through the couple of hours I've had with it on the 'Accept' route, it's definitely a much appreciated 'smaller scope' and slower paced VN as well versus some others so far. The music variety and simplicity is enjoyable as well, though I can imagine what some of the themes (especially during more emotional scenes) could sound like with further refinement as development hopefully continues <3
The character portraits for Jeffrey/our silver fox MC are a welcomed addition too, and add character (hah) to their conversations and occasionally flawed (or lack of) thoughts. I feel it helps to make them more understandable / colorful personality for sure, and fill in some of the 'bareness' that other VNs this early on may have. I've only noticed one typo near the start as well, so overall quality of the writing and art is good too and it hasn't taken away from my growing interest and immersion of the story, or scenarios that could play out as I continue
Wow, this is so good! I've played many vn's but the writing and artwork in this one is better than most of them. I love what you're doing and can't wait for what comes next.
Hi! If it's not a problem and if I'm allowed, I want to try to draw a fanart of Jeffrey and Ted for you. '^^ I'm not sure if I can succes though, because I'm a beginner artist. But at least I want to try to say thank you for your hard work. ♡
Is the game still being worked on? Becouse i honestly love it, its a well made game. Im in lovee whit the stories and all its characters it comes along. I can't wait to play it again whit more stuff added to it :)
If y'all don't mind, I'm gonna gawk a bit over this vn. I love it. That's all there is to it but it's harder to express how much I adore this thing through words, but I'm gonna fucking try. The characters are wonderful and memorable, I find it easy to put myself into the story and experience it as if I was there, and I don't even get bored or wish it was more interactive like I do literally with every other vn I've tried. I cannot wait to see what comes next, and Xarishro if your seeing this, thank you, from the bottom of my heart, for coming up with something this god dam good. Let it be known that your work is sincerely appreciated and if there is anything you might need or want help with then let me know, I'd be more than willing to lend some time to help with something if I could. I'll stop gawking now, thank you for coming to my TED talk.
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The ending where you leave made me cry I wish things worked out the two made a perfect couple and the ending where he stayed was probably somewhat the right ending but I wish there where some way to save colin/jeffry
Spoilers:
Why is someone always dying in each ending? It makes me sad but invested. 😭😭
that ending made me cry
omg, I love this novel super, although I had to wait a long time for the update it was really worth it!
I can't wait for the next update to come, keep it up!
Love this VN! Thank you so much for turning my always-dreaming fantasy into such a work! Background music also Great!
(spoiler)
Somehow before Ted mentioned his eye color, I instinctively have a feeling about his identity, so I'm not that surprised when he tells the truth. <3 Maybe that's the reason why I foolishly follow him into that world in the first place. And I notice Caijoru changes into Ted's clothes, which makes me feel really bittersweet. While waiting, I furiously imagine what adventures they have, what stories they share, just to linger so the end won't come so fast...
For another route, I appreciate the shift of viewpoint, and Sean is a good listener! Really want to know more about Caijoru's past!
I'm not great at putting my thoughts into words or writing long comments but I just gotta say that I absolutely love this VN! I found it about a week ago and I've been obsessed ever since, it's very quickly become my favorite VN.
Also Jeffrey is honestly a really relatable character for me, I like him a lot.~
I eagerly and patiently look forward to every future update.~
Hey, that's awesome :D I'm glad you're enjoying it ^^
Hello, I liked your novel very much, the horror genre I like very much. I'm a translator from Russia, and I'm part of a project that translates short stories for Russian mortals, and I'd really like to translate your short story into Russian, can I do that?
Sure! As long as it's made clear that it's a fan translation.
How can I contact you? I'm ready to provide you with a Russian translation for nothing, without any profit)
There's a button with the letter H on it that hides text. It's to the left of the options button.
(Major Ending Spoilers And Personal Mistakes Were Made) Okay. Honestly this game caught me very much by surprise, it end up sitting around on my computer for quite some time before I actually got to it... I unintentionally reading this game while I was depressed (don't worry, I ended up feeling humbled by my choices if that make sense)
Very well done on the writing and despite it being somewhat short I found it enjoyable to read and able to get more emotion out of me than a decent amount of others.
I know that there are different routes, although I do not know to what extent (I guess 3 currently with one or more in the works?) feel free to correct me if I'm wrong.
I look forward to seeing where this goes.. and who knows we might even end up with another VN
I had ended up with "two endings", as I got curious and decided to change my last choice.. my first and the one I honestly prefer wait with Caijoru as that's where I got being honest on my first run.
My second.. self-sacrifice just thought it needed mentioning, (those that have gone through it would know why) needless to say not a fan of that "ending" but hey that's what I get for being curious so yeah :P.
However I think it's best that I don't read anymore this until I'm out of this funk. Keep up the great work and ignore my dyslexia if there any spelling mistakes (if this gets deleted I understand why so no hard feelings. Just figured I would make an attempt to show some support) <3
Thanks for letting me know how you thought of the story! I'm glad you've enjoyed it. I'm sorry to hear that you're struggling with depression though. That's rough :/ I hope things go better for you soon.
In regards to routes, there are 7, though two of them haven't been started yet. If you accept Caijoru's offer in the dream, it splits off into two routes from there. One for Ted and one for Daren. If you keep rejecting his offer then it will split off into 5 routes. Ted, Daren, Marshall, Tracy, and Sean.
Hehe thank you it guaranteeable will as it comes and goes like a yoyo :P
oh nice I was not expecting that many routes, I look forward to where the future goes.
Okay route ending spoilers but
Why is smug possessed Jeffrey hot??? Mutilate me and I'll thank you sir~
(some major ending spoilers) Okay, but more seriously, is there a twitter or anything to follow to stay up to date on news regarding FbI? No rush, of course, on updates of any kind.
This is just such a good VN and it shot up to one of my favorites so quickly. Definitely top 5, maybe top 3??? There's so much to say but it's also hard to put into words. I love the Ted reveal and the feeling of straight dread, shock, and betrayal when we got FUCKING PAVLOV'D INTO KILLING SOMEONE...I just needed a couple minutes to process that because...just woah but also what?!?!??!? That moment was just so powerful...
The power dynamic shift especially coming right after that was such a good little bit of vengeance, but also terrifying and further dread inducing as I imagined being stuck as merely a passenger as the curse did as it pleased. The unnerving music was great but also kinda grew to be fun listening music. But overall it was just such a satisfying ending that I'm eager to see what else can happen in other routes. Looking forward to Daren route stuff!
I'm glad you've enjoyed it! It's always cool hearing what people think about the VN and the story, so thanks for sharing ^^
As far as news about FbI goes, I've just got the devlogs that I post here. I haven't had too much I could say recently cause I've been mostly dealing with health issues, but I am at a point where I can start working more on writing again!
I really didn't expected it to be this good, I knew that it would be good, but not that much, the waiting ending was very unexpected and really made me feel sad, it's really sad how the story unfolded, I really liked it, it's a shame that (spoiler) there's no continuation of what happened to them or if caijoru's brother came back or not, but still I really liked the opening that it makes for anyone continuing the story as they want, but yea I really liked the vn
Thanks, I'm glad you liked it!
Amazing VN. I freaking loved it so much. I am so glad I stumbled upon this, and I look forward to future builds.
Thank you ^^
Just finished all three accept route endings! Just.. wow. W o w. Your writing is reaaaaally good. The music is real good as well! I think I remember something about the music being done by you (or at least made for the game), is that true? The music is stellar and hits all the right spots at the right moments!
Not gonna lie I don't even remember there being a NSFW scene in the game
ngl dis vn too good to be read only once, currently on my third time
I really like the vn so much =w=
really love the relationship between ted and jeffrey, the ending is very good and very.. well won't say it XD
after all i rating this 5/5 stars can't wait for the update X3
Minor spoilers
Since Caijoru can be in someone's dream and control Ted at the same time, that probably means Jeffrey getting scratched in the reject route wasn't caused by the dream, he just got scratched by Ted.
Hello! I just wanted to say that the game is on an excellent path and each build is getting better and better!
I have a question and I hope you don't mind, But do you plan to release the OST on some platform? I would love to have this soundtrack!
I recently uploaded the OST to youtube since someone suggested it to me. I haven't posted it anywhere else though.
https://www.youtube.com/playlist?list=PLb2EFbNBITOzdpuuNS1mpI19YVLbw_pJq
Thank you so much!
Thank you :D
This happens the dialogue is cut off 😥😥
Is this on PC, Android, or Mac? I can look into finding a way to fix it.
Edit: I think I know what's going on. I'ma work on fixing it real quick.
Its on Android, I keep forgetting to mention that. 😅😅😅
It should be fixed now. I've replaced the old android download with the new one.
Ended up taking a lot longer than I thought to fix ^^' And unfortunately Ren'py's android emulator isn't that good since it doesn't show the actual screen size.
Anyways, let me know if there are any further issues!
This is an excellent game. The core characters are really well-written and the plot is very engaging. It was a great idea to give Jeffery such a large range of expressions. He really comes across as a fully animated, living character with constantly shifting emotions. Daren is such a great bro.
I was also very impressed by your realistic portrayal of mental illness in a obviously flawed and self-destructive yet lovable main character.
Thank you ^^
Hey! I was wondering if it's alright to use the music in this game? (Obviously with credit)
What are you wanting to use it for?
Youtube Live Stream Ending Screen, Love the song "A Tired Realization" and figured it would fit nicely.
Yeah, sure ^^
Thanks alot! and thanks for that song, it's amazing :)
The game is very well made. The music is decent, the characters are fantastic, and the plot is fairly good. The only quall I have with the game is its length. When the Accept route was finished, I was left wondering if that was really the end of the game or if I had just done something I shouldn't have. While it being short isn't necessarily a bad thing, it just felt like this game was setting up way more than it actually offered. Other than that, it's definitely a good VN!
Well there's more routes, that might satisfy you more, depending on what you felt was missing. But try this most recently added ending!
Is there any discord aerver?
There is not. Sorry about that.
No but there is a fan server. Wish I could find the invite.
marshal is best <3
I've been on a (furry) horror/depresso VN binge since finishing Echo and playing through what's available of its prequels and sequels. I'm enjoying this VN so far through the couple of hours I've had with it on the 'Accept' route, it's definitely a much appreciated 'smaller scope' and slower paced VN as well versus some others so far. The music variety and simplicity is enjoyable as well, though I can imagine what some of the themes (especially during more emotional scenes) could sound like with further refinement as development hopefully continues <3
The character portraits for Jeffrey/our silver fox MC are a welcomed addition too, and add character (hah) to their conversations and occasionally flawed (or lack of) thoughts. I feel it helps to make them more understandable / colorful personality for sure, and fill in some of the 'bareness' that other VNs this early on may have. I've only noticed one typo near the start as well, so overall quality of the writing and art is good too and it hasn't taken away from my growing interest and immersion of the story, or scenarios that could play out as I continue
I'm using the current PC build on linux, and it's using software rendering which is causing poor performance and occasional graphical glitches.
It's still more than playable so this shouldn't be considered a high priority issue, I just wanted to make sure this is documented.
Aw heck yea an update!
Can't wait to play it later :3
Yay! Update!
Is there a way to help underwrite the cost of this story?
At the moment, no, but that might change in the future!
Hello Xarishro, I hope you're doing well. 🙂🙂🙂
Will there'll be CG scenes on a certain Ted route moment?
In the future, possibly. At the moment, there just hasn't been enough time for my artist to work on it with how much else she has going on.
Wow, this is so good! I've played many vn's but the writing and artwork in this one is better than most of them. I love what you're doing and can't wait for what comes next.
Hi! If it's not a problem and if I'm allowed, I want to try to draw a fanart of Jeffrey and Ted for you. '^^ I'm not sure if I can succes though, because I'm a beginner artist. But at least I want to try to say thank you for your hard work. ♡
Sure, that would be cool to see ^^
It's not as good as you draw, but I tried my best. :D I hope you like it! ♥
Hey, that's awesome :D I showed it to my artist, Sarah, and she likes it too.
Oh, I'm surprised. :D Thank you, I'm happy! <3 (I could make Ted's body a bit shorter though...)
Take all the itme you need, best of wishes.
Is the game still being worked on? Becouse i honestly love it, its a well made game. Im in lovee whit the stories and all its characters it comes along. I can't wait to play it again whit more stuff added to it :)
Also decided to make a fan discord lol so here https://discord.gg/kPXjEM8An6
If y'all don't mind, I'm gonna gawk a bit over this vn. I love it. That's all there is to it but it's harder to express how much I adore this thing through words, but I'm gonna fucking try. The characters are wonderful and memorable, I find it easy to put myself into the story and experience it as if I was there, and I don't even get bored or wish it was more interactive like I do literally with every other vn I've tried. I cannot wait to see what comes next, and Xarishro if your seeing this, thank you, from the bottom of my heart, for coming up with something this god dam good. Let it be known that your work is sincerely appreciated and if there is anything you might need or want help with then let me know, I'd be more than willing to lend some time to help with something if I could. I'll stop gawking now, thank you for coming to my TED talk.
I want Moar!!!!!! The cliffhanger was awful. (Awful as in why!?!? Than bad.) 😃😃😃