Hello! I read a fair chunk of your story. I understand it's a WIP, but I wrote some notes. The document turned out quite long, as I had to quote some of the paragraphs where I was referencing specific text. Some of the notes are pointing out typos and program errors, while others are more general about the story.
I put it all on pastebin and set the link to unlisted + exp in 6 months. Feel free to check it out here if you're interested: https://pastebin.com/L4Wf1i4K
It's your story so feel free to take them or leave them, of course. However, I figured maybe some of the notes I wrote could be helpful, and at least save some of your time finding typos.
Thank you for your inputs and feedback. It's really helpful for the story and it helps with the improving, but if I'm being honest I kinda feel close to scrapping it all already. I've had less time to invest in the game lately. I think I need a break to focus on some real life things for a while. We'll see how that goes.
Hey author - thanks for the response and no problem. Happy to hear my notes have helped. Sorry to hear that you're considering scrapping it. I totally get how writing such a story can be very time-consuming, especially because I also write and I'm slow AF lol.
Of course, as a reader, I'd love to see you keep at it. Even if you need to go on hiatus for a while, or do much smaller updates, I definitely think it's a project worth continuing. Even if you have to relaunch the project a few years from now, it'd be great if you didn't scrap it entirely.
Either way, wishing ya the best. Good luck with whatever you decide on.
There's a certain red flag RO that will show up in Chapter 6 on Cleias route, and later if you went the Grandfather route. Still, even if you think a RO is all nice and kind, time might change things. (Some will grow up differently)
Just finished, great game. Can't wait to read some more.
MC childhood is adorable if a bit horrifying in some spots. Parents are actually nice if with some eccentricities when it come to the father. Gramps is a beast. Kalya is adorable as a best friend and it's fun seeing relationship grow.
Few errors after being "kidnapped" and pressing "The elemental has a question"
Error: cannot find a closing tag for macro <<if>></if>
<<if $element == "earth">>…
and
Error: cannot find a closing tag for macro <<if>>
<<if $element="=" "air"="">>…</if></if>
Hey! I'm not home right now so I can't check the code, but I played through the first chapter on the phone and managed to advance. Could you please tell me what word you used? I'll try to fix it when I can. (I believe this must be about the first word said when MC is a baby?)
I added a text box with a confirm button under. It should fix the issue. I also found another bug in chapter 5 regarding two different values. Forgot to add a $. Should work as intended. :)
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Am I missing something? I think we have a glitch here; Its not letting me select gender it just says boy or even get an option...help?
Hello! I read a fair chunk of your story. I understand it's a WIP, but I wrote some notes. The document turned out quite long, as I had to quote some of the paragraphs where I was referencing specific text. Some of the notes are pointing out typos and program errors, while others are more general about the story.
I put it all on pastebin and set the link to unlisted + exp in 6 months. Feel free to check it out here if you're interested: https://pastebin.com/L4Wf1i4K
It's your story so feel free to take them or leave them, of course. However, I figured maybe some of the notes I wrote could be helpful, and at least save some of your time finding typos.
Have a nice day!
Thank you for your inputs and feedback. It's really helpful for the story and it helps with the improving, but if I'm being honest I kinda feel close to scrapping it all already. I've had less time to invest in the game lately. I think I need a break to focus on some real life things for a while. We'll see how that goes.
Hey author - thanks for the response and no problem. Happy to hear my notes have helped. Sorry to hear that you're considering scrapping it. I totally get how writing such a story can be very time-consuming, especially because I also write and I'm slow AF lol.
Of course, as a reader, I'd love to see you keep at it. Even if you need to go on hiatus for a while, or do much smaller updates, I definitely think it's a project worth continuing. Even if you have to relaunch the project a few years from now, it'd be great if you didn't scrap it entirely.
Either way, wishing ya the best. Good luck with whatever you decide on.
spoons.
Sooo... Can we get some hints about the RO's? (Like the red flag one? asking for a friend)
There's a certain red flag RO that will show up in Chapter 6 on Cleias route, and later if you went the Grandfather route. Still, even if you think a RO is all nice and kind, time might change things. (Some will grow up differently)
okay, so there are 3 girls and 2 guys?
Yes. I'm still thinking about one more RO but it's not settled yet.
Thank you!
Just finished, great game. Can't wait to read some more.
MC childhood is adorable if a bit horrifying in some spots. Parents are actually nice if with some eccentricities when it come to the father. Gramps is a beast. Kalya is adorable as a best friend and it's fun seeing relationship grow.
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Thank you so much for your kind words and for spotting bugs. I appreciate it! Hope to see you here on the next updates too!
Hats off to a fellow spoon enjoyer! :)
And another
It's is when selecting to watch the sky with Kalya and "Get closer to her" at the lake with funny name
Sorry it's hard to explain the location in story
save
https://pixeldrain.com/u/P6thL1BU
Fixed! Thanks!
Few errors after being "kidnapped" and pressing "The elemental has a question"
also there is a broken </div> right by the button
save
https://pixeldrain.com/u/mkKD9Zrg
Fixed! Thanks for helping, bug-catcher!
Error: the passage "(unknown)" does not exist
Hey! I'm not home right now so I can't check the code, but I played through the first chapter on the phone and managed to advance. Could you please tell me what word you used? I'll try to fix it when I can. (I believe this must be about the first word said when MC is a baby?)
Yes, it's the baby bit.
Strange word i used last time works now, but after trying few random ones found aword "speak" both capitalized and nottrigger it.Also space both in front and after any? word trigger it
I think it's because rolled back and tried another word, initial word works after rollback but no other does
here's a save
https://pixeldrain.com/u/ypxhpkbA
The word used was "Yes"
Thanks! I'll check it out tomorrow and try to fix it if I can.
I added a text box with a confirm button under. It should fix the issue. I also found another bug in chapter 5 regarding two different values. Forgot to add a $. Should work as intended. :)
Great game I like it very much :) can't wait for the update
Thank you!!
*psst what is the password i the maze? I thought it was the characters first word since I chose the 7 letter first word but I cant open it..."
The password is Diavolul (it's in the hint phrase). You have to type it in the box and press submit :)