I would like the game to have the option to change the language in settings, such as Spanish, Portuguese, etc. The one I most hope for is that they add the Spanish language hahaha
Hey there, I'm back to offer some more feedback since last time. This update is SO MUCH BETTER! You guys did a much better job with the pacing of the story and it definitely flowed a lot more naturally. There's a much clearer sense of what you guys are trying to go for with the story of this game, and I'm happy that you were able to find this and fix it, so congrats on that! I was able to finish it properly this time around and I enjoyed it all the way through. There are a few small things here and there that could use a fix to help aid the story, but of course, it isn't gonna be perfect, especially since you just rewrote it. Rather, I'd like to point out - maybe even suggest a few things that jumped out to me after my first playthrough that I hope can help a bit.
The first thing I noticed is that when we are reading the main character's thoughts, it's probably better not to have his name in the nametag so that you don't confuse it as him speaking out loud, even when the text box turns brown. I think having it turn brown is fine, but rather the nametag probably shouldn't be there when he isn't speaking is all.
For the CGs, I don't think there's a need for a notification about artwork being unlocked every single time it shows up, but instead, I think a single notification after the first CG that tells you that each image can be accessed through the gallery would be much more fitting.
The artist did a much better job with the sprites, and I think the redesign fits much better! If I remember correctly last time, Bowers' sprite definitely doesn't take up as much space on the screen anymore haha. They fit in much better with the design, all while keeping the same shocking size of their hefty guts on full display (which I'm all for LOL). I also found that Hawke was a much better secondary character to introduce to us for the intro, rather than that other character who just felt rude (I forgot his name). It seems it helped a lot with making the reader ease into what's going on with the situation of the main character. Speaking of which, I also wanna point out that the music here is very enjoyable, and really sets the atmosphere while reading. Plus those sound effects are used much more appropriately and are there to add another unique thing about the style of this game.
The character journal is a little curious as it seems to explain a little more of what happened to the main character in the intro rather than the actual intro explaining anything? I am not sure if it was meant to be like that, cause after what I saw in Feenyx's description, it feels like his description would fit better on the front page of the game here on itchio if anything lol. It doesn't seem to describe his character but instead just describes what the game is about. Looking back now it seems the character descriptions of both Feenyx and Hawke are a lot more revealing than what might be intended for? (At least I'm guessing). Especially Hawke, since it mentions a few things about him that were never brought up during the conversations of this update. Other than that I love the idea of the journal, including those little silly graphics.
Anyway, that's all I wish to say for now and again, I hope this helps a bit. Seriously though, Congrats on the major improvement! I'm looking forward to what's coming next! :D
loved both versions, but the pacing here was much better. is there an official upload time/schedule or is it just a 'as it gets done' sort of thing? very excited for more in the future! :) <3
Ok, that was *much* better than the original build. Everything actually making sense now, and flows organically with each other... well, almost. Gotta give props to dev for listening to feedback and giving it there best to improve (I know I played a large part in trashing the original build by sometimes it needs to be done)
Looking forward to the story continuing. You've piqued my curiosity.
The journal's a nice feature. It gives an extra something outside the story. Aside from other points already mentioned, if I had one critique, it'd be the sound effects paired with the characters' reactions. They're a little...distracting, for me, at least.
But, I'm looking forward to more with the revamps you have underway.
I want to like this story but I have so many questions. Like why the player-character is such a dick...? Jeez your surrounded by hulking masses of flesh and your first instinct is to go for fag? Doesnt seem very relistic to me. Like the character doesnt have a sense of danger or something. I dont know maybe Im just a hater; but this seems kinda rushed.
The Writer can also waste his own and the reader's time by letting the MC throwing a fit and scream for weeks until he cooled down and accept that not all creature want to kill him. Remeber what kind of audience FVN are for...
It's better for the audience to connect to an Furry/animal loving MC, who accepts that fear/screaming and running away wont help him. A little bit of bravery allows the MC to gain respect from audience and the fictional characters alike.
Happy middle is all im looking for lol. Being brave and being stupid are two very different things. Fear is what makes us human. Which is also ironic because we're still animals ourselves. SO the whole quote should be fear is what makes us animals. But that's not the point. The point is that if the mc has nothing to fear from the beginning; in a setting where the mc doesn't even have a special skill (No running ur mouth is not a power its a hinderance), the whole story can be thrown off course. Turning something beautiful in to something sad and deluded. And I for one wouldn't want to read that. Got enough delusional people in the world. Subtract from the problem dont add to it.
Edit: Now that ive read the new and improved version.....im lovin it so far. It seems the author has taken the time to really hear out the comments here and on other social forums so I'm gonna continue to be patient and see where this goes. Keep it up guys!!!!
LOVE THIS +__+ I thought the pacing was perfect. I have read many bara VNs and often they drag out a scene having the dialogue be too verbose. But the writing here, each scene says and shows what was needed for it and moves on to the next one, wonderful. Excellent art, character designs, background art, music, sound effects, like that cracking sound of what happened to the main character, fuckin ow, I winced hearing it, very immersive drawing me in instantly. My only critique is the narration, having a main character be the narrator, often what is narrated and what is their own thoughts both get lost together. So when y'all are rewriting the story (which saddens me cause I love this 1.0 version) I'd suggest an example as "Feenyx eagerly awaits Bowers' cock" etc instead of feenyx thinking/narrating "I eagerly awaited Bowers' cock" as such. so yeah solid 5/5 from me honestly, can't wait to see the next update :D
Can we get an option to change the text colour? I can't play because I can't read the black text on the dark brown dialogue box (This is the android version)
No updates for now. But I have finished some of the new sprites for the new rewrite demo we will be releasing. CGS and backgrounds are still not finished, so it'll take time is I can tell you.
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fun game
When's the next update? No rush just wondering if there is a set schedule or? Great work so far! I'm really enjoying the vn!
We are still writing chapter 1, plus I have to rework the sprites and draw the CG's and backgrounds. it'll take a while.
Awesome, thanks for the response! I can't wait to see where you take the story! (^_^)
I love this game so far and can't wait to see how it continues
i have problem i can.t see the gallery do i need to delete the old ver?
I’m currently fixing the issue rn.
–Romiz Xrako
I would like the game to have the option to change the language in settings, such as Spanish, Portuguese, etc. The one I most hope for is that they add the Spanish language hahaha
We’ll considered it.
But the game is super good, very entertaining and intriguing to be honest.
Thank you!
Hey there, I'm back to offer some more feedback since last time.
This update is SO MUCH BETTER! You guys did a much better job with the pacing of the story and it definitely flowed a lot more naturally. There's a much clearer sense of what you guys are trying to go for with the story of this game, and I'm happy that you were able to find this and fix it, so congrats on that! I was able to finish it properly this time around and I enjoyed it all the way through.
There are a few small things here and there that could use a fix to help aid the story, but of course, it isn't gonna be perfect, especially since you just rewrote it. Rather, I'd like to point out - maybe even suggest a few things that jumped out to me after my first playthrough that I hope can help a bit.
The first thing I noticed is that when we are reading the main character's thoughts, it's probably better not to have his name in the nametag so that you don't confuse it as him speaking out loud, even when the text box turns brown. I think having it turn brown is fine, but rather the nametag probably shouldn't be there when he isn't speaking is all.
For the CGs, I don't think there's a need for a notification about artwork being unlocked every single time it shows up, but instead, I think a single notification after the first CG that tells you that each image can be accessed through the gallery would be much more fitting.
The artist did a much better job with the sprites, and I think the redesign fits much better! If I remember correctly last time, Bowers' sprite definitely doesn't take up as much space on the screen anymore haha. They fit in much better with the design, all while keeping the same shocking size of their hefty guts on full display (which I'm all for LOL). I also found that Hawke was a much better secondary character to introduce to us for the intro, rather than that other character who just felt rude (I forgot his name). It seems it helped a lot with making the reader ease into what's going on with the situation of the main character.
Speaking of which, I also wanna point out that the music here is very enjoyable, and really sets the atmosphere while reading. Plus those sound effects are used much more appropriately and are there to add another unique thing about the style of this game.
The character journal is a little curious as it seems to explain a little more of what happened to the main character in the intro rather than the actual intro explaining anything? I am not sure if it was meant to be like that, cause after what I saw in Feenyx's description, it feels like his description would fit better on the front page of the game here on itchio if anything lol. It doesn't seem to describe his character but instead just describes what the game is about.
Looking back now it seems the character descriptions of both Feenyx and Hawke are a lot more revealing than what might be intended for? (At least I'm guessing). Especially Hawke, since it mentions a few things about him that were never brought up during the conversations of this update.
Other than that I love the idea of the journal, including those little silly graphics.
Anyway, that's all I wish to say for now and again, I hope this helps a bit. Seriously though, Congrats on the major improvement! I'm looking forward to what's coming next! :D
loved both versions, but the pacing here was much better. is there an official upload time/schedule or is it just a 'as it gets done' sort of thing? very excited for more in the future! :) <3
Thank you for the comment! We will address about that soon.
I like this rewritten version better. The MC was not hostile to Bowers and actually got along better with him. Looking forward to more of the story.
Ok, that was *much* better than the original build. Everything actually making sense now, and flows organically with each other... well, almost. Gotta give props to dev for listening to feedback and giving it there best to improve (I know I played a large part in trashing the original build by sometimes it needs to be done)
AAA finally the demo is out! congrats you guys! keep up the good work! 😊👍
Thank you for the comment! 😊
Looking forward to the story continuing. You've piqued my curiosity.
The journal's a nice feature. It gives an extra something outside the story. Aside from other points already mentioned, if I had one critique, it'd be the sound effects paired with the characters' reactions. They're a little...distracting, for me, at least.
But, I'm looking forward to more with the revamps you have underway.
Thank you for the nice comment! We made so much effort with this game. 😊
I want to like this story but I have so many questions. Like why the player-character is such a dick...? Jeez your surrounded by hulking masses of flesh and your first instinct is to go for fag? Doesnt seem very relistic to me. Like the character doesnt have a sense of danger or something. I dont know maybe Im just a hater; but this seems kinda rushed.
The Writer can also waste his own and the reader's time by letting the MC throwing a fit and scream for weeks until he cooled down and accept that not all creature want to kill him. Remeber what kind of audience FVN are for...
It's better for the audience to connect to an Furry/animal loving MC, who accepts that fear/screaming and running away wont help him. A little bit of bravery allows the MC to gain respect from audience and the fictional characters alike.
Happy middle is all im looking for lol. Being brave and being stupid are two very different things. Fear is what makes us human. Which is also ironic because we're still animals ourselves. SO the whole quote should be fear is what makes us animals. But that's not the point. The point is that if the mc has nothing to fear from the beginning; in a setting where the mc doesn't even have a special skill (No running ur mouth is not a power its a hinderance), the whole story can be thrown off course. Turning something beautiful in to something sad and deluded. And I for one wouldn't want to read that. Got enough delusional people in the world. Subtract from the problem dont add to it.
Edit: Now that ive read the new and improved version.....im lovin it so far. It seems the author has taken the time to really hear out the comments here and on other social forums so I'm gonna continue to be patient and see where this goes. Keep it up guys!!!!
Either way, the new rewritten demo is out, and forget the older build, the new one is much better. Play that.
Will do and will leave a edited review once I'm done
LOVE THIS +__+
I thought the pacing was perfect. I have read many bara VNs and often they drag out a scene having the dialogue be too verbose. But the writing here, each scene says and shows what was needed for it and moves on to the next one, wonderful. Excellent art, character designs, background art, music, sound effects, like that cracking sound of what happened to the main character, fuckin ow, I winced hearing it, very immersive drawing me in instantly. My only critique is the narration, having a main character be the narrator, often what is narrated and what is their own thoughts both get lost together. So when y'all are rewriting the story (which saddens me cause I love this 1.0 version) I'd suggest an example as "Feenyx eagerly awaits Bowers' cock" etc instead of feenyx thinking/narrating "I eagerly awaited Bowers' cock" as such.
so yeah solid 5/5 from me honestly, can't wait to see the next update :D
Can we get an option to change the text colour? I can't play because I can't read the black text on the dark brown dialogue box (This is the android version)
any idea when will be ubdate?
No updates for now. But I have finished some of the new sprites for the new rewrite demo we will be releasing. CGS and backgrounds are still not finished, so it'll take time is I can tell you.
Great artwork. I'm excited to see where this goes. The scene where the mc is getting carried by his new Alfa was soo cute!