Heart Cage [Demo]

best yandere game fr, the game is still demo but super good

I love the game so far, the UI is amazing, the lore is intruiging, and I like the characters, but I do have some issues.

1) The english is this game is, honestly, not good. There's broken english, unnatural phrasing, and bad grammar all over the place. This is by far my biggest criticism of the game. The bizarre and sometime outright bad choice of words really throw off any kind of mood trying to be built, and in some instances completely ruin the pacing of scenes. I have a feeling this is machine translation, but you really need to get an english proofreader to iron out these issues and make it flow correctly. Hell, I'll do it for free. For example - The fight with the kidnapper where he says "Don't think I won't fight back!" being unnecessay padding for what should be a fast paced action scene, female lead thinking about her PTSD and cursing that it's come back when she's meant to be on the verge of a panic attack seeming unrealistic, the sentence after Luke leaves where female lead thinks about how she's anything like a bunny being worded weirdly, Dane calling us "Sillyhead", just off the top of my head.

2) Shoehorning, another thing that leads to pacing issues. The worst instance being the female lead's flashback to her parents murders. This felt so unnatural to happen at the moment it did and felt like you were just trying to shove the information in for us. Please remember this is only a demo, we don't need all the information right now, even for our own character, we can get hints! This is a visual novel, show, don't tell. We can fill in the blanks and information can always be introduced more naturally later on - for example a flashback during a conversation where we as the main character open up to the male leads.

3) Dane and Enox need looking at in my opinion.  Dane's colour combination with the current saturation just doesn't look fabulous - His eyes are way too bright for the rest of his colour palette, I would probably suggest desaturating them or darkening them somehow. And I noticed on Enox's in game sprite there's a weird line on his neck which makes it look like his head was pasted on the rest of the body, the lines don't meet up correctly and the shading is odd, it just looks wrong, like they were done as 2 separate pieces and merged together.

4) Why is female lead ok with being kissed by Luke and Dane? In her own mind, she only met them earlier in the day, even while panicking, I cannot see how she would have no comment about this?

Overall, a good demo! With a bit of refinement, I think this could be ok!

加油 期待完整版！

好棒的游戏！！！作者大大加油哦！期待完整版！！！！

really hit my heart...

期待完整版TAT

YIPPEE!!! Can't wait for the full game really!

作品疯狂戳我心上！

I really can't wait for the full game!

真的超棒，每个人设都很好，很难不爱，想知道什么时候有完整版的，好想看后续！

作者加油www我很期待後續正式版！！！女主的立繪蠻可愛的~~病嬌屬性的男主我喜歡

Really great start, I am hooked! Can't wait for the full version 

i cant wait any more !!!啊啊啊啊啊后续后续！！！

期待完整版！！大大辛苦啦

www期待作者大大的完整版！好喜欢！呜呜呜呜呜呜呜呜迫不及待！

this is sooo good!!! i was really enjoying the story until realized it's demo lol gaaahhhh im so looking forward for the full version!!!!! i cant wait!!!!!!! tho its still not fully released but everything already is so perfect! story? characters? art? voice actors? literally 100/100 !!!!!!!!!😳😳😳😳😳🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥 ngl im missing the characters already😭😭😭😭😭

这是什么神作，期待完整版啊啊啊！！作者大大继续加油

天呐卢克简直了太戳xp——真的超级期待完整版！作者太太加油！！

Damn this is amazing! Can't wait for the full game release!

啊啊啊啊啊真的很好玩！期待完整版！

AHHH!!! THIS IS SO GOOD!!! I LOVE ENOX SO MUCH!!!!😫😫

虽然只是Demo可是真的也很精彩！！人物塑造地超级棒！！超级喜欢Enox！！现在超级期待正式版！！而且配音演员都好优秀！如果正式版需要付费的话这将是我第一个会付钱的游戏！

看完安利立马购买，真的太爱了！！

看了安利来的。只玩了一会就爱上了这个游戏！！作者太太很会写！三个男主人设都很喜欢！声优们也很贴角色！！

Cant wait for it!!好期待!!聲優很棒很澀氣!!

完全爱上了这个作品，超级带感www期待更新！作者大大辛苦啦

我真的很爱!!!!因为在B站看到太太的游戏游玩，才注册了这个网站，狠狠关注接下来来的更新啦！！！很好！很期待很色气！！

!!!!!!sooooooo amazing!!!!

rice太太的新作！畫風跟前兩作比起來感覺越來越精良了，而且進步好大owo！好期待後續的發展qvqqqq這次居然是全配音的！辛苦rice和配音員啦~

（順帶一提繁中版我捉到了兩處錯字 怕劇透什麼的就把它們挪下面一點啦！（（

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第一個是初遇盧克的時候我聽了英文的語音對比了一下 應該是“身手不錯”而非“新手不錯”？

第二個是在女主選擇伊諾克斯線的時候 應該是“走著瞧吧”而不是“走著朝吧”（？

不知道有沒有理解錯，如果不是的話我就獻醜了qaq

如果是的話可以改進一下！也希望rice越來越好！:333以及我真的超期待後續的！XDD

謝謝rice的遊戲，非常期待後續!!!懸疑感和瘋批男主我真的超愛，配音老師也配的好棒!!!但更讓我震驚的是老師的技術力，居然都是老師一個人做的嗎?!!真的好厲害!!!請老師收下我的膝蓋!!!!老師加油!!!我迫不及待想玩正式版了|•'-'•) ✧

很期待正式版！！三个男主都很可爱特别是Dane,黑皮狗狗特别好！老师的几个作品都很棒>3<

DAMN good i wanna more

Ohhhhh，your game is as good as ever~This time it's also great!（ ˝ ᗢ ̈˝ )

This is a wonderful VN! I am looking forward to the full game -- there is so much detail already in the demo and I want to solve the mystery alongside the MC also!

No hate or anything but you should add noncon in the warnings ^^

I LOVE THIS SO SO MUCH AHHHH it's so beautifully written, and the art is amazing!! The voice actors? THEY DID AMAZINGGGG. I love everything about this! is there anyway we can support the game (patreon or kofi)?

OMG you guys were not kidding around with these choices, just starting off at 1000. I am speechless! You all did a fantastic job with this game with the incredible VA, the lovely art, intriguing story, and AMAZING opening theme song. I'll definitely be on the look out for a full game, yall have me hooked ^^

Just finished the demo and what a coincidence that I play on the same day as Dane's birthday! Happy birthday to the obsessive and overprotective boi!

I really can't decide who's my favourite, all of them are making my heart race... I want them all including Clark lol But Enox is definitely a guilty pleasure, all his interactions so far were entertaining~

Really looking forward to the full game! The characters, CG and voice acting is top tier! And the murder mystery plot has me on the edge of my seat... All the edging and teasing in this demo I can't even.