Honestly, quite better than I expected! I'm very interested to know how this will continue, nice job! May I ask what did you use to make the models and all?
Is there a community Discord server or something like that? It's a pretty nice tool to keep track and stay up to date with this kind of stuff :)
Also, a Walkthrough that tells you what choices lead to what outcomes could be pretty nice.
If possible, you could also add a "gallery" option to see the unlocked scenes, like some other VNs do.
Hey! Nice to read that you liked my game, unfortunately, I don't know if I'll put this development on standby. I've received mostly bad reviews and even lost some Patreons since the last update.
I don't like to leave things unfinished, but is not encouraging to work on a project with a lot of bad reviews.
By the way, I used Honey Select 2 for the graphics, there is a discord server if you want to learn: https://discord.gg/illusionsoft
For what it's worth, I think the story you're setting up is pretty interesting. Some things do need some polishing, but I can see this going places. All I can say is that good things take some time, and that I believe learning from bad reviews and deciding what to apply to improve is the way (at least in part) to success.
I know this comes from nowhere, but if you think you'd continue with some help, I'm willing to volonteer, consider it a collaboration, to help you develop the story. I know nothing of Ren'py, but I do know a bit about writing and more about cinematography and image and video editing, and I also speak Spanish, which I think would make things way easier for you (I'm typing this in English purely so other people can understand it if they read it).
Unfortunately, I'm not in an economic position to support a patreon, but I can tell you if I were, I'd strongly consider supporting this.
I thought it looked like Honey Select 2, but I wasn't sure, you did a great job with the models.
Thank you for your kind words, I really apreciate it.
And thank you for your offer, maybe we can talk to see if this could work. Send me a mail to: mr.georgie.dev@gmail.com, I´ll be busy the next few days but I'll try to respond asap
Depending on how successful your visual novel will be, may I suggest hiring a translator or two to help correct or fix any grammar errors you may in your game? If not, I am sure there are apps out there that can help tweak the dialogue and translate the game better :)
About the apps, I use Grammarly and DeepL at the same time, unfortunately, sometimes the sentences make no sense, so I have to trust my limited English skills to fix them.
About hiring a translator, I'd love to. But, as things are seen now, maybe not be soon.
No problem, maybe you can set up a donation fund for the game or develop the game to have additional downloadable chapters or something to help raise money to hire one or two translators? If not, I would also suggest to maybe have a friend or co-worker to help out and perhaps cut him or her a profit from translating. :D
Don't worry too much about your english, it's fine. Now it's not my native either, but i use it everyday without a hitch. Not to mention the medias i consume. I did notice a couple oddities like "the Viktor's hitman" at some point, but nothing bothered me all that much.
Cool game with a nice pannel of romanceable characters in terms of bodies and personalities.
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Honestly, quite better than I expected! I'm very interested to know how this will continue, nice job! May I ask what did you use to make the models and all?
Is there a community Discord server or something like that? It's a pretty nice tool to keep track and stay up to date with this kind of stuff :)
Also, a Walkthrough that tells you what choices lead to what outcomes could be pretty nice.
If possible, you could also add a "gallery" option to see the unlocked scenes, like some other VNs do.
Hey! Nice to read that you liked my game, unfortunately, I don't know if I'll put this development on standby. I've received mostly bad reviews and even lost some Patreons since the last update.
I don't like to leave things unfinished, but is not encouraging to work on a project with a lot of bad reviews.
By the way, I used Honey Select 2 for the graphics, there is a discord server if you want to learn: https://discord.gg/illusionsoft
That's awful to hear :(
For what it's worth, I think the story you're setting up is pretty interesting. Some things do need some polishing, but I can see this going places. All I can say is that good things take some time, and that I believe learning from bad reviews and deciding what to apply to improve is the way (at least in part) to success.
I know this comes from nowhere, but if you think you'd continue with some help, I'm willing to volonteer, consider it a collaboration, to help you develop the story. I know nothing of Ren'py, but I do know a bit about writing and more about cinematography and image and video editing, and I also speak Spanish, which I think would make things way easier for you (I'm typing this in English purely so other people can understand it if they read it).
Unfortunately, I'm not in an economic position to support a patreon, but I can tell you if I were, I'd strongly consider supporting this.
I thought it looked like Honey Select 2, but I wasn't sure, you did a great job with the models.
Thank you for your kind words, I really apreciate it.
And thank you for your offer, maybe we can talk to see if this could work. Send me a mail to: mr.georgie.dev@gmail.com, I´ll be busy the next few days but I'll try to respond asap
Depending on how successful your visual novel will be, may I suggest hiring a translator or two to help correct or fix any grammar errors you may in your game? If not, I am sure there are apps out there that can help tweak the dialogue and translate the game better :)
Thanks for your comment!
About the apps, I use Grammarly and DeepL at the same time, unfortunately, sometimes the sentences make no sense, so I have to trust my limited English skills to fix them.
About hiring a translator, I'd love to. But, as things are seen now, maybe not be soon.
Despite the flaws, I hope you enjoyed the story.
No problem, maybe you can set up a donation fund for the game or develop the game to have additional downloadable chapters or something to help raise money to hire one or two translators? If not, I would also suggest to maybe have a friend or co-worker to help out and perhaps cut him or her a profit from translating. :D
Thanks! I'll think about it ;)
Hey there Mr Georgie,
Don't worry too much about your english, it's fine. Now it's not my native either, but i use it everyday without a hitch. Not to mention the medias i consume. I did notice a couple oddities like "the Viktor's hitman" at some point, but nothing bothered me all that much.
Cool game with a nice pannel of romanceable characters in terms of bodies and personalities.
Thanks for your comment! I'm glad you like the characters. I hope you enjoy the upcoming chapters as well.